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Candlewitch
Candlewitch
Mar 10, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Seed

 

Seed

 

She was hermetically sealed

so he cracked her,

gently, deftly,

like a freshly laid egg

easing her s l o w l y

down into

the waiting bed

of the frying pan

for his dining pleasure.

but (some say)

he didn't

know how to cook!


— Candlewitch, Mar 10, 2008

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Region, Country: Northwestern Wisconsin USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe, William Blake, Bob Dylan, Tom Petty, Carlos Castaneda, Jim Morrison, the whole of Neopoet and many more., Candlewitch

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Candlewitch

Candlewitch

18 years 2 months ago

LMAO!

Keith, your comment really cracked me up! Hopefully he was a gourmet chef who left the *Crisco in the can where it belongs! (oh, the images that come to mind!) Always, Cat
asiajy

asiajy

18 years 3 months ago

humorous

I started laughing immediately after reading this. I don't know if that's what you were going for, but thanks for the laugh.
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

18 years 3 months ago

Thanks Rob,

You were spot on. I'm glad you enjoyed my humorus little poem! Cat
NC

nothing fancy …

18 years 3 months ago

lol

this brightened up my day:]
KN

Kieran Nelson

18 years 3 months ago

I think the whole egg=woman

I think the whole egg=woman thing, works well enough with the line "so he cracked her". I thought the 2 other parts to solidify the analogy kinda ruined it, made it too obvious (egg, frying pan?) I think the last line would have much more impact without the words egg or frying pan being used. I'd suggest reading it without those liens and see what you think. Kieran "Mind, how you go!" - Roger McGough's poem for LSD Awareness Week
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

18 years 3 months ago

Thank you Kieran,

I read it the way you suggested, and it certainly makes for a new poem. I will have to think some more on this one and give it time to sink in. Your suggestions and opinion are greatly appreciated. Cat
P

poewriter58

18 years 3 months ago

Cat

a word before I leave you blew your cover way too soon like the idea behind it though would like to see more suspense for the reader is she talking about eggs or a relationship or both type thing Chrys
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

18 years 2 months ago

Hello,

Thanks for the input, Chrys. Maybe we can talk sometime, when you return from your trip, and you can give me some pointers on how you would have done it differently. Come back soon, Cat
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

18 years 2 months ago

Hi Janice,

I'm so happy that I amused people with this one! Thanks for your input! Cat
professor

professor

18 years 2 months ago

Smile

Well you know what they say Cat, "out of the frying pan into the fire"...but perhaps he was just a lousy teflon-coated lover who did not know about the sensual wonders of extra virgin oil. lol Keith
Seren

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

LMAO

On that smiley note I am going to bed lol nice way to finish my day at, 4am ,loved this one Cat made me grin from ear to ear .. much love and hugz Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 10 months ago

LOL

Dearest Jayne, I'm so glad this piece brought a smile to your pretty face. love and hugs, Cat
NC

nothing fancy …

16 years 10 months ago

wow

i love how you worded everything and i had such a great laugh