Nymphomania

The kind of poem all men like reading Lacy.lol. But seriously I thought it was great until it suddenly changed pace between these two lines: "or that it’s only momentary, and you’ll never see them again" it lost momentum for me then and i was expecting to be carried along by the strong rhythm towards some pithy or tongue in cheek conclusion. Am not too sure about the last image of heart made of coal. Its obviously another way of saying its not made of stone and the combustible aspect is appropriate but somehow the word itself just doesn't sound right for me in this context. May be if you changed the image around and said "but my heart's a burning coal". Anyway just some rambling thoughts...still enjoyed it of course.Keith

There are distinct images of bed-hopping and one night stands in this poem. I think the poem speaks of a deep inner loneliness that can't be satisfied. cat

I like the theme Lacy, its an often taboo subject but sex addiction is the same as any other addiction. You can go two ways with this. Wild passionate and full on or questioning, guilt ridden and confused. Personally I like the full-on approach because the sensitive reader will get the emptiness behind the casual sexual gratification anyway. The first few lines are really just preamble. I would like to see some bold, even shocking lines at the front of the work. Good stuff. You are not timid in your writing and I think most will appreciate that. All the best eric

What can I say..the title drew me in..the last line did not work for me but hey I'm old..my nympho days are over..kinda.sorta. I like your work..thanks for posting.

Lacey I dont want you to get pulled between me and Eric on this one I would have been pretty happy just with changing the coal image and keeping the poem more suggestive than spelling it out as it now does. Sorry if that is not what you want to hear and its just my opinion of course. But as far as the current version goes my main problem is with the section below: just like…wait..what was his name? Quinn just a pleasing night of passion, just a passing sin, a compulsion that overtakes me an urge I can’t control, for someone to just take me, fill me to the depths of my soul, to fill that ache and burning need, to take on my favored role, I like the image of the "what was his name" but the long line just throws the whole momentum of the poem and doesn't really work. The next two lines are fine but then the following two are effectively a repetition of the same thought. The next line "for someone just to take me" seems a bit limp given the sense you are really trying to convey which is of allowing yourself to be used and discarded... ie."fuck me" would be more like it. The next line is a little too long and perhaps you could emphasise filling your empty soul? In the next line the repetition of fill does not help. With the "take on my favored role" im not quite sure what you mean, but it does not come across as very strong. OK this is probably way too detailed for you but I hope it is of some help..at least in conveying how it was for me. Fact is I like the poem alot Lacy so want it to come out well as much as you do. Keith

a compulsion that overtakes me an urge I can’t control, for someone to just take me,>>> This could be written as- a compulsion an urge I can't control for someone to just take me. The power of the line " for someone to just take me" is magnificent here. I know a lot of femenists would be appalled but the line is just right, and absolutely true in this context. Well done and well said. This is a good revision- very direct and you kept it simple which I think the subject of this poem needs. Flowery words would only dilute it. I don't really have a problem with the last line, but you might consider changing it if you think of an even stronger image than burning coal. Big Yes to this. Brave writing. eric

The sensitive side of nymphomania is what came to me. The emotinal side. I was expecting the wild side, that's just me, but this was good too.

Doesn’t do for old men to be tantalized, Caused my blood to boil, and my hearts now recovering from cardiac arrest, I'll leave corrections to the masters, For Me; Very, Very Good!!! Loved it. Very Best Regards Peter

How on earth did I miss this first time around? Lacy this is beautiful writing, full of sharp imagery and emotion. The rhythm and pacing really bring this to life. :-) Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.

Finely polished from the original. The wild side seeps through!! Sorry it took me so long to see this new one. The computer and I are mortal enemies during the weekend.