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Mistress Moon

Mistress Moon
by: c.m.m.

the wee hour of 3 a.m.
passes me by
and I, awaiting
the early morning chill
with a dedicated
lack of anticipation,
shiver in the fading darkness.
I am the midnight child
come alive at moonrise,
drifting on the tides
I am pulled
by the cycles
of my mistress moon...


— Candlewitch, Mar 03, 2008

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Region, Country: Northwestern Wisconsin USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe, William Blake, Bob Dylan, Tom Petty, Carlos Castaneda, Jim Morrison, the whole of Neopoet and many more., Candlewitch

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Candlewitch

Candlewitch

18 years 3 months ago

Hello Moon Man

Thank you for your kind words. I think that 3 a.m. is the true witching/mystical hour. It is nice to know that others share my affection for both the hour and the moon. Cat
RSScheerer

RSScheerer

18 years 2 months ago

Mistress Moon

Cat, there are times when I think you've gotten inside my head. This piece is a direct representative of one of those times! It's like looking into a mirror. Truly beautiful write. I didn't read the original, but Eric's suggestions seem to have been on the spot, because this is perfect. Only one thing doesn't do it justice, in my opinion. The title is too light for the depth of the poem. When I saw the title and then read the poem, the contrast struck me right away. ~ Ronda
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poewriter58

18 years 3 months ago

Cat

It does me proud to see you get the remarks you are getting so glad my course helped you along it was my pleasure and you were great to work with didn't need much work at that you made my job easy for those that are not aware Cat was one of my first on line students and she does me proud Chrys
professor

professor

18 years 3 months ago

Ah those wee small hours

Nothing quite like those hours is there really Cat, a combination of peace and frustration. It is a lovely poem and following your edit i would not change another thing. Keith
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

18 years 2 months ago

Thanks, Ronda

Yes, Eric is always a great help to me and greatly respected by me also. I am at a loss for an alternative title, but I am always willing and happy to take suggestions. I guess I felt very small when faced with the magnitude of my feelings at this moment, that is why the title is as it is. Thanks for reading! (the moon is one of my favorite subjects) Always, Cat
Mark

Mark

18 years 2 months ago

Cat !

lol I see a problem in the title there. In The Wee = In The Urine OR In The Small So you see it really does not make sense ;) I really do not think "In the small hour of 3 AM" works (unles you somehow explain why it is "small" You know it is legit to take a word from inside the poem and use it as the title? Hint - just don't choose one at or near the begining nor the end lines of the poem. Best of luck, Mark
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poewriter58

18 years 2 months ago

Cat

Thew new title is perfect! I to am laughing at Mark's comment Chrys
Mark

Mark

18 years 2 months ago

It is not really out on edge

BUT I think a more traditional poem with title from poem the last line it works perfect. Ya might get a little more crit on that. Better to be up front than to try and sneak it in from where it might stop the reader to go looking for what the reader can't really remember that the title is that line lmao Awesome work, Mark
RSScheerer

RSScheerer

18 years 2 months ago

???

Now you're confusing me, Mark! LOL Wasn't there a hint not to use a line from the beginning or end up there somewhere? :) ~ Ronda
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

18 years 3 months ago

Hey Chrys,

Your writing course was most beneficial to me and I would recommend it to writers of any age. Thanks so much... Cat
RSScheerer

RSScheerer

18 years 2 months ago

mine, too

You do remember my user name at that "other place," right? The moon is my favorite muse. Why not Mistress Moon, actually? Or is that too obvious? I can't read the poem while I'm replying to your comment, dangit. Will read again and see if I have any better title suggestions, if you're looking for one. ~ Ronda
RSScheerer

RSScheerer

18 years 2 months ago

Mark!!!

I can only laugh because "In the Wee" made me think the same thing - which is why I had to say it didn't fit here. I'm laughing too hard to give you a serious suggestion now, Cat. Thanks, Mark!! But I do agree with him. You have a lot of great words to choose from for a great title. ~ Ronda
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

18 years 2 months ago

Glad you like it, this one

Glad you like it, this one was Ronda's idea. Yes, Mark is quite a character, he had me laughing, too! You should see his comments on my "Beer !" post. Always, Cat
Mark

Mark

18 years 2 months ago

Hey... cundused?

Ronda, I am certainly NOT among those of the "ivory tower" (no secret) ;) Mark
RSScheerer

RSScheerer

18 years 2 months ago

Yes

I stick with my suggestion. I see Jessica made the same connection in her message way up there. "My Mistress Moon" Fits very nicely. ~ Ronda
RSScheerer

RSScheerer

18 years 2 months ago

Ivory towers

Mark. I was hoping for a tour! You know I'm kidding. :) ~ Ronda
Mark

Mark

18 years 1 month ago

Tour?

You hold the throne :) Getting up the nerve to knock on the door myself but I don't know . . . Mark
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

18 years 2 months ago

It was a pretty name having

It was a pretty name having something to do with the moon. I have been hoping to rid myself of that other place but they are STILL bombarding me with e-mail after sending them several letters asking them to stop. Mistress Moon it shall be! Always, Cat
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

18 years 2 months ago

Ronda

Thank you for the suggestion! Always, Cat
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abrelosojos

18 years 3 months ago

Good

Enjoyed reading this lovely poem...especially the ending. "my mistress moon" is awesome choice of words and alliteration and i think it would make a great title. Don't forget me --I won't remember anything else.
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

18 years 3 months ago

Hello,

Thank you for reading my poem and taking the time to respond to it by telling me what you liked! It is always a joy when your work is appreciated! Cat
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eric ashford

18 years 3 months ago

I like this also. Suggest

I like this also. Suggest cutting "quickly" from L2 also - "hither and thither" from L11. Good job. eric
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

18 years 3 months ago

Hello

Thank you Eric, for your helpful suggestions. I took you up on them and made the changes. I appreciate you reading and commenting on my work. :) Cat
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purplemoondoll

18 years 3 months ago

I am the midnight child come

I am the midnight child come alive at moonrise, Your images are crystal clear and the flow makes the whole piece dance beautifully. Magical! I loved reading this - nice work! Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

18 years 3 months ago

Hi Kaz

Thank you for your most eloquent praise! Cat
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poewriter58

18 years 3 months ago

Hey Cat

You just get better and better this is outstanding Chrys
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

18 years 3 months ago

Hi Chrys

As always, I appreciate your review. I have been working hard on being as open and honest as my alter ego, Styx. If I have come even a touch closer to my goal, I am grateful to the powers that be. I will keep striving to be as good and honest as he is, but I know I have a long way to go. Thanks for helping me down this road. Cat
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eric ashford

18 years 3 months ago

Yes to the revision. Its

Yes to the revision. Its much tighter and direct now. A good poem just got better. All the best eric
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

18 years 3 months ago

Hi Eric,

I too, believe it is a better poem now, thanks to your helpful suggestions. Cat
Mark

Mark

18 years 3 months ago

Ohhhh Cat !

This is me ! Do we know each other? Maybe in another lifetime huh? Mark
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orgami

18 years 3 months ago

orgami

"shiver in the fading darkness" an echo of a candles blush cast by in moonlight meadows trance hypnotic duration moons inclination I Love your poem just wrote these lines I was so inspired You amaze me Candlewitch this is excellent poetry!!
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

18 years 3 months ago

Hello Orgami!

It is one of my greatest desires to inspiration others. I am made speechless by such high praise from a poet of your caliber. I too, loved your inspired words. You made my week! Thank you so much for sharing with me. Cat
themoonman

themoonman

18 years 3 months ago

Hi Cat...

That is when I write...riding the tide in the wee hours. This is really good poetry.
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

18 years 1 month ago

Richard

I don't know how I missed this comment, but I apologize for it and taking so long to answer. Thank you for your comments. Always, Cat
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Ink Dragon

16 years 10 months ago

Cat,

I missed this one the first time around, glad you threw it in the stream again. Ha! Ronda, of course, loved it, as I knew she would when I had read your piece. Needless to say that so do I. Loved the lines I am the midnight child come alive at moonrise, Beautiful little gem, Cat! Yours, ~Nina
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 10 months ago

Thanks Nina

I'm glad you liked it. (especially those lines, as they are my favorites!) I'm making all my poems private, like you. Can you tell me if there is a way to do it that will not put them back into the stream? As it is I have only been doing a couple a day so as not to hog up all the space. Always, Cat
ID

Ink Dragon

16 years 10 months ago

Cat,

as far as I know, it is only possible to do it when going through edit. The good thing about it is that we get a chance to read each other's old post that we missed the first time around, but I feel bad, too, for updating poems without really editing them... I'll ask Andrew if there is a different way that could be implemented. Yours, ~Nina
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 10 months ago

Nina

Please message me with the solution if you find another way to do it. Thanks. Always, Cat