Mistress Moon

Cat, there are times when I think you've gotten inside my head. This piece is a direct representative of one of those times! It's like looking into a mirror. Truly beautiful write. I didn't read the original, but Eric's suggestions seem to have been on the spot, because this is perfect. Only one thing doesn't do it justice, in my opinion. The title is too light for the depth of the poem. When I saw the title and then read the poem, the contrast struck me right away. ~ Ronda

It does me proud to see you get the remarks you are getting so glad my course helped you along it was my pleasure and you were great to work with didn't need much work at that you made my job easy for those that are not aware Cat was one of my first on line students and she does me proud Chrys

Nothing quite like those hours is there really Cat, a combination of peace and frustration. It is a lovely poem and following your edit i would not change another thing. Keith

lol I see a problem in the title there. In The Wee = In The Urine OR In The Small So you see it really does not make sense ;) I really do not think "In the small hour of 3 AM" works (unles you somehow explain why it is "small" You know it is legit to take a word from inside the poem and use it as the title? Hint - just don't choose one at or near the begining nor the end lines of the poem. Best of luck, Mark

Thew new title is perfect! I to am laughing at Mark's comment Chrys

BUT I think a more traditional poem with title from poem the last line it works perfect. Ya might get a little more crit on that. Better to be up front than to try and sneak it in from where it might stop the reader to go looking for what the reader can't really remember that the title is that line lmao Awesome work, Mark

Now you're confusing me, Mark! LOL Wasn't there a hint not to use a line from the beginning or end up there somewhere? :) ~ Ronda

Enjoyed reading this lovely poem...especially the ending. "my mistress moon" is awesome choice of words and alliteration and i think it would make a great title. Don't forget me --I won't remember anything else.

I like this also. Suggest cutting "quickly" from L2 also - "hither and thither" from L11. Good job. eric

I am the midnight child come alive at moonrise, Your images are crystal clear and the flow makes the whole piece dance beautifully. Magical! I loved reading this - nice work! Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.

You just get better and better this is outstanding Chrys

Yes to the revision. Its much tighter and direct now. A good poem just got better. All the best eric

This is me ! Do we know each other? Maybe in another lifetime huh? Mark

"shiver in the fading darkness" an echo of a candles blush cast by in moonlight meadows trance hypnotic duration moons inclination I Love your poem just wrote these lines I was so inspired You amaze me Candlewitch this is excellent poetry!!

That is when I write...riding the tide in the wee hours. This is really good poetry.

I missed this one the first time around, glad you threw it in the stream again. Ha! Ronda, of course, loved it, as I knew she would when I had read your piece. Needless to say that so do I. Loved the lines I am the midnight child come alive at moonrise, Beautiful little gem, Cat! Yours, ~Nina