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Journey to Find the Maiden Fair
leaving the sweltering offal
of the heat
we encounter
grassy glades of undulating landscapes,
covered with soft,feathery foliage,
leafless and thorny,the acacia tree,
with dark boughs and vast black trunks,
bunches of lavender fruit,
like grapes hanging
from the highest branches
of the tallest trees,
then we heard
the thunderous roars
of the mighty waterfall
that rains down
in thundering gouts of white foam
into the swirling green pools
at the foot of the vessal of life,
after toiling for a bit
we ventured forth
until the land began to sway
and encompassed all the earth,
there were golden savannahs,
paridisal oasis',
and rivers that crawled like dark serpents,
the misty horizon gleamed like molten fire,
the girl waif
was there to greet us
as if we were expected,
we sat humbly in the cloud gardens,
the olive groves
and the orchards
all meticulously tended,
the statues inlaid with ivory,
arcane symbols with sonorous tones,
diverse and complex,
we perched ourselves
in a common-place abode,
the ethereal luminance
of the full , magical moon endured,
it descended,
it enchanted,
it weaved a magic spell,
charming and enigmatic
was the emaciated waif.
The timid inquisitor.
She was precocious and kind,
she was trusted and beloved by us,
but demented were her guardians,
with our help
she gathered her courage,
defied,
and shunned
their unpalatable truth,
their eminent undoing
was their archaic inadaquacy,
and hurtful blandishments,
at their immutable obstinacy,
all her anger and frustration,
abounded forth from her,
she'd had enough,
she was no longer their slave girl,
but ,a woman,with thoughts and a mind,
and under our gentle instruction,
A true lady we did find,
With the caked dirt scrubbed off her body,
and a few washes of her hair,
a little meat on her skinny bones,
and we found a maiden fair.
Comments
Calliope
18 years 2 months ago
sorry
poewriter58
18 years 2 months ago
If by Poe you are meaning I
poewriter58
18 years 2 months ago
very well done
poewriter58
18 years 2 months ago
now
Calliope
18 years 2 months ago
I agree
poewriter58
18 years 2 months ago
how about
eric ashford
18 years 2 months ago
My problem with this is
Calliope
18 years 2 months ago
just revised
eric ashford
18 years 2 months ago
Good to see you got a title
Calliope
18 years 2 months ago
Thanx eric
eric ashford
18 years 2 months ago
My pleasure. Its good not
Calliope
18 years 2 months ago
So how do you like it now?