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ritual sacrifice

sacrificial slaughter,

death wails spew forth,

the smoke wafts

from the torch bearers,

howling in murderous ecstasy,

the frenzied rhythm

of the drummers,

beating with wooden clubs

on the hollowed out trunks

of the kikelia tree,

make their victims

cower in fear,

praying for a savior,

but nothing can surpass,

the palpable lure,

of the tentacles,

of the spell.

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Region, Country: New York, USA

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eric ashford

18 years 2 months ago

Exciting stuff. The last few

Exciting stuff. The last few lines lift the whole poem. Well said. (you have typo- ecstasy) All the best eric
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Thomas_S

18 years 2 months ago

Wild

and wonderfully chaotic. You make it easy to envision the madness and cacophony of it all :) I'd rate the experiment a success!
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poewriter58

18 years 2 months ago

well done

as long as you aren't copying sentences verbatim it is fine has a dark feel to it check spelling good work Chrys
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Calliope

18 years 2 months ago

No

I didn't write verbatum,these were randomly picked words and when reading them back This came from it I'm about to send another,In the same fashion ,randomly picked words.Doin't know how this one will work yet[little tipsy when i wrote it lol] Lacy, Where power corrupts,poetry cleanses.
professor

professor

18 years 2 months ago

Human sacrifice!

Interesting books you are into Lacy, I look forward to turning over the page with you to find out how they felt at the moment of sacrifice..lol. As the others have said already this was clearly an experiment that worked....definitely didn't suck! But i wont be taking a leaf out of your book any time soon. Keith
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Sirens Serenade

18 years 2 months ago

Dark

Wow! really my sort of poem. Love the way you have caputured the atmosphere...I can almost hear that beat of the clubs. Glad I'm not one of your victims!
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

18 years 2 months ago

Hello,

It looks like your experiment was a great success! The subject matter gives me chills. Good work done here! Cat
Rob Graber

Rob Graber

18 years 2 months ago

Suits You!

I hope you will do more of this; the method seems to heighten your poetic skill and creativity.