Electric Blue

Mar 02, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Dark Messenger

Fear the reaper not I!

Come visit me again

Do not turn away and hide yourself

from me

Why do you leave me behind?

Why do you not take me across the dark waters

Across the slough of despond?

I have paid my fare

Take me to where no pain remains

where you do not have to think

to dance with death

and celebrate it

I will

Grim reaper takes to the stage

with mic in hand

Here he can hide away amongst us

His music draws us into his web

we are mesmerised, captivated

by his magic spell

he steals our souls

and we celebrate

the dance of death

because of the addiction

this is when we are most alive

alive for an instant

but we crave more!

— Electric Blue, Mar 02, 2008

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Country/Region: GBR

Critiques

RSScheerer

18 years 3 months ago

Dark Messenger

Take it from someone who spends more time in the shadows and darkness - it often provokes the best work. This piece seems a bit loosely collected, i.e. your thoughts may have been scattered a bit, or it could be the fact that you were trying something new. Not to say that it's a bad try!! As always, any comments or suggestions are yours to take or leave! That said, my suggestion would be to keep working on this one. Every word we write is another in the direction of stronger work. ~ Ronda

Electric Blue

18 years 3 months ago

Dark Messenger

Hi Ronda Well the story behind this verse I was sitting in my front room listening to my fellow sing in my ear re headphones I was drawing and writing I had the TV on in the background I looked up and saw the Grim reaper at a Bar have a Beer (an advertisement for Beer)and this is the first verse etc the second verse I saw my man he is a Rock musician an outlaw Ha! and I saw him performing I could just see him there Ha! So this was a fun poem But anything can set me off to write a word a song a vision anything and this was the outcome Not planned just flowed

Candlewitch

18 years 3 months ago

Maggie,

This is good work, but the first stanza doesn't feel as strong as the second. I wrote something on this subject and it isn't nearly as good as yours and this piece could be better with just a little more work. (I love the second stanza!) Cat

Electric Blue

18 years 3 months ago

Dark Messenger

Hi CAt Well if you see the reply i sent Ronda you will understand this poem Recall I had the TV on saw an advert re the Grim Reaper having a Beer in a Bar and this set me off on the first verse then I thought of guy a rock musician an outlaw the second verse as i could see him performing and it made me smile But also a look into the darkside my mind running to a place i have been many times trying to escape from it love Maggie R

Candlewitch

18 years 3 months ago

Hi Maggie,

Thank you for the story behind the poem. The poem is awesome! Hugs, Cat

poewriter58

18 years 3 months ago

welcome to neopoet

the first four lines need just a bit more push to them I agree with cat, although the rest of the stanza will hold I do like your style Cat said you were good nice to see you here Chrys

Electric Blue

18 years 3 months ago

Dark Messenger

Hi Chrys If you see the comments i sent to Cat and Ronda the stroy behind the poem. I am drawn to this and tried to be falling into the depths in the first verse and then i saw my guy perform and based the second verse on him hugs Maggie

Lonnie

17 years 6 months ago

Cool, Maggie!

Well-penned piece about the darker elements we deal with! Bravo!

Electric Blue

17 years 6 months ago

Dark Messenger

Lonnie I thought i give the darkside a go. I saw and image and had to write and it unfolds as i write so no plan of how it will turn out. I love a challange and will explore words always. Just let my pen flow on the paper as it waits electricblue

Ravenshakti

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Electric Blue...

I love this poem! What happens to me when I write a poem is this: It usually comes to me in my Lucid Dreams. (and in the one's not so Lucid too!) My poems whisper, and I write them down. But they're the ones that are really writing me... I think you shine with a beautiful light, that is a gift of grace... making the dark, bright. Gentle regards, Raven.

Electric Blue

16 years 5 months ago

Dark Messenger

Raven I was just going through some of my poems and found your wonderful comment I am honoured the mistress of darkness we share the same dreams of how things come to us. To me is was a visual other times like you a whispered word can set me off. At present my light seems just about to flicker it needs another light to brighten this soul Well this was my first try of the darkside It seems to be the place I am meant to be Did you read my Velveteen Magic Rabbit this is of a similar ilk. By others here I have been called The Mistress of Nature the Highness Princess swathed in the Forest Green Wow but that is how I feel at times I feel privilegded to receive the messages the calling from mother nature But ususally to the forest green or to the ocean blue Or my safe place My Secluded Grotto another poem a special place for me not quite so dark Full of dark blues and greens and a little shaft of light always Electric Blue