docmaverick

Feb 29, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Say It Now

How many suns

have closed the day,

and when will it arrive...

..that certain day?

Before those feelings

fade like smoke in the wind...

..into a longing...

..say it now.

How many moons

have flown right by...

..will you finally say it

when the loved one dies?

Before a moment

hardens your heart...

..for what you didn't say...

..say it now.

And how many moments

have you let evaporate?

'cause waiting for that moment...

..might make you too late.

So Before that moment

comes back to haunt...

..say it now.

How many times

have you let die...

..is it beneath you

to even try?

'Cause in the long run

you'll only hurt your own heart...

..Before it'll be too late...

..say it now.

— docmaverick, Feb 29, 2008

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

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Critiques

docmaverick

18 years 3 months ago

elf.......

....I know, I know.....you don't like inspirational poems. But, before it's too late, I'd like to say "Thank You".....for your keen insights, and constructive criticisms. There.......................................that was not too late!!! Later on, Doc.

pinksheep

18 years 3 months ago

This

poem to me made me feel mellow- regards pink

Rob Graber

18 years 3 months ago

“Before a moment / hardens

"Before a moment / hardens your heart": I like that gentle urgency--very effective phrasing (and the repetition of "Before"; not sure about the bolding--perhaps a little heavy on the urgency). Maybe it is a poet's(and psychoanalyst's) bias, but one can't help feeling that too much goes unsaid... Cool text! (Contrariwise: I was recently amused to hear Norman--the crusty old math professor of the movie On Golden Pond--say: "I don't see why everybody has to talk about everything all the time.")

eric ashford

18 years 3 months ago

Nice rhythm to the work. I

Nice rhythm to the work. I like the fact that it does not try to say too much but leaves the reader room for their own visions. If it over-explained itself it would have fallen into the usual trap of over-sentimentality and cliche. If it were mine I would be looking for ways to dispense with the connectors (the ands ans so's). I don't understand why you have "before" in bold but I know it is unnecessary and a distraction. Well poemed eric

Calliope

18 years 3 months ago

A very...

neccessary message.It was a great poem ,but I have to agree with the others that the bold 'before' is distracting and jarring.Otherwise it was very good. Lacy, Where power corrupts,poetry cleanses.

docmaverick

18 years 3 months ago

...the BOLD before....

.....was done hurriedly, as I almost named the piece "Before"...but, then decided on "Say It Now". Honorable mention was to be printed in bold writing. Sorry for the distraction. Thanks for the input. doc.

pinksheep

18 years 3 months ago

It is

interesting Erics comment leaving out connectors and& so , i think this is what has tried to be explained to me at a writing group, with not i hasten to add the same conciseness and clarity - regards pink