The Winter is Long

Talk about an unexpected ending...loved it..don't like the cold though..be glad to see the summer roll in...

and this is a good word portrait, but with a little bit of work it could be excellent. I can't put my finger on exactly what just now, something to do with the sentences not hanging together well, cheers, Jess

Jess aptly described this piece! Great use of simile, especially, "it is grey and solemn like a worry" I have to adjust my reading to the style you use, more of a paragraph than the usual sort of end-stops and enjambments I am accustomed to seeing. The words more than make up for any adjustments I may need to make in that sense, though. Ronda

for yourself and for my offended sensibilities. It might seem trivial to you, but it makes you look illiterate and is so easy to fix. You do it all the time. When you use a comma, the space comes after ,not before. The space comes after, not before. See its easy. cheers, Jess

I loved the words you used here Pink, The ending is awesome, came as a surprise~ I hope you don't give up on this piece! _____________________________ To write a touching poem, you must gently stir the soul, if it brings forth tears or smiles, then the story was beautifully told. ________Janice Pearce_________

Hi Pink, I really enjoyed this work, you have a really intigueing style, I look ofrward to reading more from you. I would be interested to see you experimenting with different presentation of the words, spacing & such, that's just a thought, it's fine as is. Thanks~ Anni ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ "Occasionally in life there are those moments of unutterable fulfilment which cannot be completely explained by those symbols called words. Their meanings can only be artic

This is lovely and I know those Winters in Derbyshire where it rains half the year too, damp and cold, yet with its own charm. I liked you description very much. Yours Ann of Norway