terminal girl

Wow Lacy this one really is sad, I hope it does not reflect how you feel. It really moved me and i would not change a thing (you have a mispelling of "wonder" in a couple of places). You are very productive in this period...baby must be keeping you awake..lol. Keith

Good job with the rhythm and rhyme--gentle and sad, to reinforce the mood. (PS: I too noticed the "woders" in lines 11 and 15--hard to get anything by us old professors :-,? [user is smoking his pipe smilingly])

The work lacks a subject. Its theme has no movement and so it is only one note in a song that has not been sung. The title implies someone at an airport or at a terminus of some emotional journey, the poem however, does not address this subject and so it goes nowhere. It could be a good poem but you need to work on revealing some past association to the scene you paint. All the best eric

Through the darkest times we seem to find our muse. I'm glad you have discovered yours once again. ~ Ronda

I thought this great, from beginning to end~

I really loved this, the rhythmn was spot on...this definitely works for me!

Thanks for the heads-up re "cancer as subject" lacy this does put the work in a new light. Sorry I did not pick up on that at first. Suggest you find a way to make this clearer for other slow wits like myself. eric