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C
Calliope
Feb 28, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

what he missed

insatiable

his appetite

it gripped him by the balls

 

Theres no letting go

those bonds that tie

he's in over his head

 

he's crying now

almost dead

he's sorry now

no time for dread

 

just one more look back

 

at all that he missed...

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themoonman

themoonman

18 years 2 months ago

Hi Calliope..

I think the line changes enhanced this short and meaningfull piece...nicely done...
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IKnowNoBox

18 years 2 months ago

felt that once myself

oh was it eye opening I had to let go of a lot of luggage so I could use my arms to climb out. The pulse through this poem is new for you and I like where it is going. In ink, dabbler
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

18 years 2 months ago

Hello

I like the raw gutsy-ness of this poem! Cat
professor

professor

18 years 2 months ago

Moving on

I feel there are some distinct undercurrents going on in this poem Lacy which give it additional depth of meaning. As Cat says it is very gutsy and the first verse hits you between the eyes as well as between the legs.lol. It captures too the knowing that when you move on in your relationships it is very hard not to look back with regret...but that is truly the kiss of death. Keith
C

Calliope

18 years 2 months ago

thank you all

For your wonderful comments.I've been trying to experiment a little with different styles ,but don't have too much time with a baby and all,lol.But will post when I can. Thanks again. Lacy, Where power corrupts,poetry cleanses.
RSScheerer

RSScheerer

18 years 2 months ago

what he missed

Raw style; a nice new approach to try. Nice to see different sides of our favorite poets. ~ Ronda