Candlewitch

Feb 23, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Fragile Connections

Moon, Stars, and planets awaken to the night

Patiently their lights awaited...

The watcher in me rewarded

By this heavenly display beyond

The sight of soft tingling fire in the skies

Meanwhile, back on Earth...

~*~

His truth was night lights in the harbor moorings

The mind's picture of a moment standing

Though the sea casts a glistening

Glimpse of desire to ebb tide.

Light chimes on boats coming and going

with mirror blades hidden in high tide

While on shore…

~*~

Steady amidst the licking flames

Of the flickering campfire,

Lie embers in a bed of hot glowing coals.

There's a time to tally the score

To rally and circle the wagons

Stir and replenish the fire once more.

— Candlewitch, Feb 23, 2008

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Northwestern Wisconsin USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe, William Blake, Bob Dylan, Tom Petty, Carlos Castaneda, Jim Morrison, the whole of Neopoet and many more., Candlewitch

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Critiques

RSScheerer

18 years 3 months ago

Nice technique, Cat

I like the shift between frames. It adds depth to this piece. Nice! Fix one small punctuation issue, "light's" can lose the apostrophe. ~ Ronda

Candlewitch

18 years 3 months ago

Ronda

Nice to see you! Thanks for the help... you should be a proof reader! I hope that all is going right in your life and you are well. Best wishes, Cat

RSScheerer

18 years 3 months ago

No problem as far as the help. I always worry that I'm too particular when it comes to proofreading and editing! I'm happy that you've joined our "little" community! Can't wait to read more of your work. ~ Ronda

pinksheep

18 years 3 months ago

Great you have talent

Would meanwhile on earth or meanwhile on the earth be better? Would taking beyond off the 4th line be better?-of the 1st stanza-This poem is like a buttercup seeping in the white sunshine pinksheep regards

Candlewitch

18 years 3 months ago

Hello pinksheep!

Thank you so very much for reading my poem and taking the time to make helpful suggestions! I am looking forward to reading more of your work! Cat

pinksheep

18 years 3 months ago

Cat

Thank you for your response above it gave me a buzz - pink

Snpdrgon

18 years 3 months ago

beautiful!

love the images, and the moral at the end; so true. xxx Lisa~

Candlewitch

18 years 3 months ago

Hi Lisa!

Thank you dear girl. Did I tell you that you have great eyes? Very soulful! Take care of yourself, Cat

Rob Graber

18 years 3 months ago

Great imagery! In a most

Great imagery! In a most attractive text, line 5 seems to me especially lovely...

Candlewitch

18 years 3 months ago

Thanks!

Thank you so much! It was nice of you to tell me what you liked about my poem/prose. I'll be seeing you around, Cat

Electric Blue

18 years 3 months ago

Fragile connections

Hi Cat This is amazing so alike my poems we seem to use the same words i am a stargazer i love the stars the sunrise the sunset i travel the universe it is neverending my friend This is so tender so colourful i love all the elements seen and unkseen love and hugs Maggie R

Candlewitch

18 years 3 months ago

Hey Maggie!

I had a feeling that this poem would appeal to you, knowing your lovely style as I do. Thank you so very much! Hugs, Cat

poewriter58

18 years 3 months ago

my twice cents

Hey Cat this must have been posted while I was away as always you have outdone yourself beautiful work and I heartily agree with Ronda good writing but then I would expect nothing less from you Chrys

Candlewitch

18 years 3 months ago

Hey Chrys,

Thanks for your vote of confidence, it means much to me! Cat

Arrow

16 years 12 months ago

Thank you for the last stanza.

When I was a child, I hated driving at night because the small, moving tail-lights only highlighted how huge the surrounding darkness was. Your poem has reframed that and I especially liked the last stanza, with a community banding together and making warmth flourish. Your poem is ambiguous enough that I'm not sure that's what you meant but if not, please don't tell me otherwise! Thanks for introducing yourself to me.

Candlewitch

16 years 10 months ago

Hello Arrow

Thank you for reading, and you have found part of the meaning of my poem. Always, Cat

orgami

16 years 12 months ago

Wow the greatness of Neo once again

Here is something I missed but now have found a great poem once long ago we had a campfire or seaside fire at Olympic Penninsula on the beach the tall Mount Rainier in the background lit up by the sun since set for us on the beach the fire warming us the breakers slow and low what a grand poem Candlewitch We have a big tabby cat and little grey manx I love your Siamese and your long hair (mine is a bit long and growing)

Candlewitch

16 years 10 months ago

orgami

Thank you so much for reading and finding some pleasure within my poem. Actually the cat I am holding in the picture is a Birman. They have white toes, but look much like a siamese. I have four cats... 2 birmans, 1 hymalayan and a calico. Thank you for noticing my hair, I am now sitting on it as it is that long. I love long hair on a man. Always, Cat