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atorn
atorn
Feb 21, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

where the ocean meets the sky

I've run and loved

as I've cried and been bled

and where i have made it

I've slept in that bed

only real desire

was to run filled with fire

to a place

where the ocean meets the sky

now in this solitude

I know what I'll find

where the dreams

connect with the sky

but dreams go on forever

to end them would be a lie

where the ocean meets the sky

nothing to be said

nothing I can do

searing accusations

come quickly into view

I've wondered what would happen

if I turned and walked away

would it be the ending?

rather sad, and why?

the storm is never ending

and the ocean never meets the sky

 

— atorn, Feb 21, 2008

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Country/Region: new mexico

Favorite Poets: leonard cohen, charles bukowski, gary nicholson

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Snpdrgon

18 years 3 months ago

“and where i have made

"and where i have made it I’ve slept in that bed" Love that line! beautiful, Andrew. xxx Lisa~ "Defend your peace."
atorn

atorn

18 years 3 months ago

thnks

thanks lisa hop your feeling better xxxxx
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orgami

18 years 3 months ago

placid latitudes

"but dreams go on forever to end them would be a lie" reminds me of the late Phillip K Dick great poem reminds me that i have touched Pacific Atlantic Hudson Bay and whatever waters are off Jamaica
atorn

atorn

18 years 3 months ago

thanks

thanks man phillip k dick was a cool writer glad i am mentioned in the same sentence with him if your pkd fan and havent allready done so read "i am alve and you are dead" if you have trouble finding it let me know and ill send you my copy
themoonman

themoonman

18 years 3 months ago

Hi Z...

Another good write from you...I think it reads well..good job on this one...the sight of the ocean can be a very humbling time for us all...
atorn

atorn

18 years 3 months ago

thanks

glad you enjoyed it ive been reading your work and its good to get praise from someone whose writing you enjoy
RSScheerer

RSScheerer

18 years 3 months ago

where the ocean meets the sky

Your last two lines left me suspended, caught between the ocean and ths sky. Great writing! Welcome to Neo. Rumor tells me we both crossed over from another side (I was forever_moongate there). Glad to have you among us! ~ Ronda
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

18 years 1 month ago

Great poem

Smiles:) Barbara There is nothing like standing on Myrtle Beach by the waters off the Atlantic Ocean in the midnight hour. Wonderful feeling of majestic power I'll never forget. The ocean meets the sky The ocean never meets the sky Beautiful lines I tried to imagine the other side of the Atlantic Ocean. I see lovers meet like the ocean meets the sky and love ending like the ocean never meeting the sky Probably not your image. but reminds me of my visit and only visit to any beach at night, pass 40 by then. Great experience. Thanks for sharing.