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Too High Part Two

Only air and knifes take me apart

I love losing life as I lose love

I never want to lose yours

You are all I have ever dreamed

And all I have ever seen in love

But take all these things I never said

And take them to the desperate heart I hold with conjugation of different words

But more of you

Than have I ever been

I know this

I have lived it

I have loved you

And this hour I wait

Until the hours take me away

And drowned me in their dyeing love

But your eyes lead me

In the dark and in the light

I dream you every night

— washing tears, Feb 20, 2008

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Region, Country: sandusky, ohio, USA

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RSScheerer

RSScheerer

18 years 3 months ago

Too High Two

There is no internal logic in this one. It skirts from here to there without making any real impact. Lots of great ideas, but none cohesive enough to hold it together. Once again, a great start to something that could be better. Notes: "knifes" - "knives" "dyeing" - "dying" ~ Ronda
washing tears

washing tears

18 years 3 months ago

thankyou for reading and

thankyou for reading and your thoughts. the errors came because i was um... high at the time. thats where the randomness of nonsense came from. Washington Fear