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One
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Numbers

A list of numbers are what we've become
It doesn't add up, I can't find the sum
At the time of our birth we receive the first
It follows us through life just like a curse

As we go to school we get our next
It's written in our books of text
When we start in sports another is there
It's placed on the uniforms that we wear

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When we graduate school there is a scale
A list of numbers from head to tail
If we choose to serve another number we get
Forced into your head you will never forget

Number follow us even to death
When you pick your plot for your last place of rest
I hope this little story will open your eyes
Your just a number to them, you can not deny

— One, Feb 13, 2008

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Region, Country: UK, GBR

Favorite Poets: Candlewitch, Eddy Styx, Ziggy

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themoonman

themoonman

18 years 3 months ago

Hi One...

Welcome to Neopoet...I like the content. Its one of those things that affect us all..The last word in the first stanza I think you meant it to be curse. It through me off. The flow of the poem is a little off, at least when I read it...of course it could be me...The title....it is natural to want to name it numbers but it is already repetitive...You don't have to change anything..this is only my opinion.
One

One

18 years 3 months ago

I thank you for your

I thank you for your opinion. And yes I did mispell curse. Thanks again
R

rpverlaine

18 years 3 months ago

Numbers

I don't think that the rhymes in the poem serve it as well as one might hope. The poem might be more natural and interesting without them -rp