professor

Feb 09, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Waking to my love

Soft tendrils of form finger-touch

The beginnings of consciousness.

An image floating, closeted

In the deep recesses of mind,

Appearing, disappearing;

Drifting on a warm, streaming light,

Leaking past fluttering eyelids.

Faster now, a steady presence,

Image slowly bringing focus;

Eyes opening onto a smile

Whose lips briefly press their desire

Upon a softly waking face.

Your eyes staring up into those

You know have one life-long message

That is the tenderness of love.

— professor, Feb 09, 2008

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: China/Sichuan/Chengdu, CHN

Favorite Poets: Yeats, Elliot, Auden, Keats, Shelley, Byron

Critiques

professor

18 years 3 months ago

Devoured

That is the kind of word i like to hear Theresa! I'm glad you enjoyed it and thanks for your appreciation. Keith

Mark

18 years 3 months ago

A Familiar Feeling

Those precious times when you are there but she may not yet be and you just look at her and have that feeling going on. That feeling of how wondeful, and ya just look - not to disturb. Mark

j_h08

18 years 3 months ago

Beautiful...

Well written, " closeted " just doesn't look right to me,( perhaps hidden instead? ) but that is my observation.

Candlewitch

18 years 3 months ago

Awesome write!

A charmingly beautiful depiction of your inner most feelings. A lovely read on this Valentines Day! Cat

blistered-pen

18 years 3 months ago

i had to read it like, 5 times but i finally get it. lol, it's not the writing, just my mind's slow on understanding.. but now that i do understand it, it makes me feel teary. in the best way. i can feel the love you must've been feeling when you wrote this. it's truly beautiful. i hope i can find the love you describe someday.. kudos tenfold =) p.s. it really is perfect for this Vday, for people with or without that someone, kudos again.

professor

18 years 3 months ago

Only almost?

Well if its only almost I still clearly have some work to do..lol. Seriously though I am very happy you could feel the emotion behind my words because that is what i wanted to come through their tone as well as their meaning. And if you are as sensitive to this as you appear to be then you are also capable of great love so I am sure you will find someone deserving of that. Keith

LadyTheresa

56 years 5 months ago

Powerful and Tender

Keith, I very much enjoyed reading your poem. It's tenderness is very strong and powerful and spoke to me. This piece gives me a snapshot of a most intimate and tender moment in your life. I devoured every word and would not advise changing any of it. Very masterfully written! Write On! LadyTheresa :)

professor

18 years 3 months ago

Precious times

Thanks Mark, yes those moments when she is there but not quite aware of the effect her sleeping face is having on you are very precious. Keith

professor

18 years 3 months ago

Closeted

Thanks for your comments. No I don't mean "hidden", this is a warm feeling in the mind that you want to keep carefully and safely inside yourself....hence "closeted" but you are happy for others to see it. Keith

professor

18 years 3 months ago

Valentne

Thanks Cat...yes it does capture my inner most feelings although hopefully those i have everyday and not just on Valentine's...lol. Keith

meic

18 years 4 months ago

This is a beautifully

This is a beautifully presented description of a precious tender moment. Not a wasted word. Mike "not all matterings of mind equal one violet" ~ e e cummings ~

professor

18 years 4 months ago

Tender moments

Thanks Mike, such simple moments of tenderness can sometimes last a lifetime...or at least i hope they can. Keith

cricket

18 years 4 months ago

Tenderness of Love

Tenderness of Love very beautiful Keith, Looks like maybe you have found your someone for a lifetime.. Very nice description in this write friend. Simple moments can last a lifetime.. BrownEyesBlue

professor

18 years 3 months ago

Finding love

Thanks Cricket, I'm glad you liked this one and yes maybe i have found love. Keith

poewriter58

18 years 4 months ago

beautiful

soft subtle imagery. There is such a quietness about this poem like mist drifting Chrys

professor

18 years 3 months ago

Quietly drifting

Yes you certainly have picked up the loving and misty drifting tone in this one Chrys. It says all that i wanted to...and may be more, Keith

pinksheep

18 years 3 months ago

Tender Moments

The way Chrys described this poem - soft subtle imagery -I could not have put as well . pinksheep not nearly as well, to be totally honest.

pinksheep

18 years 3 months ago

Tender.....

To describe this poem as-mist drifting- Chrys has summed this beautifully. I look forward to reading more of your work with great excitement. pink

professor

18 years 3 months ago

Read on

Thanks twice Pink...hope you enjoy some of the others as well. Keith

carnyspook

18 years 3 months ago

I like it

It almost seems that you were in a dream that became a reality. It is good when a dream and reality can drift into oneness

purplemoondoll

18 years 3 months ago

Every word and line has been

Every word and line has been carefully thought through and beautifully crafted. I love the opening lines in particular. Stunning poetry as always - excellent. Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.

professor

18 years 3 months ago

Every word..

Thanks so much Kaz...as you can imagine this particular poem does mean alot to me and is very personal. Every word was indeed chosen with very great care and tenderness. Keith

RSScheerer

18 years 3 months ago

precious and tender

Like most other readers, those are the words that come to mind. This is lovely. ~ Ronda

professor

18 years 3 months ago

Tender

Thankyou Ronda, I'm glad you like it as well. Sometimes poems almost write themselves out of a single poignant image and pure feeling...this is one of those. Keith

Ink Dragon

17 years 5 months ago

Professor,

I can relate to the content- our loved ones never stir our hearts as much as when they´re still asleep...But what I love about this piece is the slow, tender rhythm. You`ve definitely found the perfect rhythm for the mood you describe... Well, this one is going to be my night-cap for today. Thanks, ID