theladyblue

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Published in my poetry anthology Soapbox Trophies. Release date TBA. Thanks for all your support! :)

— theladyblue, Feb 09, 2008

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Country/Region: USA

Critiques

poewriter58

18 years 4 months ago

refreshing

You poem was a refreshing pleasure to read.It had a nice soft dreamy quality to it , very soothing great imagery Chrys

theladyblue

18 years 4 months ago

Thank you so much for your kind comment on my poem but I must ask...if it was you who voted on it...why did you vote it poor then say such nice things? The whole point of the rating system is so that we can get constructive critisim instead of just fluff comments. Please if there is an issue let me know so that I may better myself. "For every shadow, no matter it's depth, is threatened by the morning's light..." <3 Emarie

poewriter58

18 years 4 months ago

so sorry Emarie

That was an error on my part yes it is deserving of all five stars Chrys

theladyblue

18 years 4 months ago

please do not think i feel i

please do not think i feel i deserve all five stars dear i was just concerned that there was an issue not being made. i am here to improve my skill...which sometimes seems a joke lol thank you for saying so i just want to be sure. "For every shadow, no matter it's depth, is threatened by the morning's light..." <3 Emarie

professor

18 years 4 months ago

Form and pain

At first sight of course this does not look like a poem although it most certainly is...may be that is why someone gave it such low score. People do forget that poetry has many different forms, not just the conventional one. Your words ebbs and flow beautifully with their imagery...hence i score it very differently. There is no lasting pain in nature any more than there should be for you Emarie. Keith

theladyblue

18 years 4 months ago

I was concerned that many

I was concerned that many would take one look and say this is not poetry and it may very well not be to some. However I am glad you can see the difference. Lasting pain sometimes chooses its victims they do not necessarily choose it. tel est la vie "For every shadow, no matter it's depth, is threatened by the morning's light..." <3 Emarie

meic

18 years 4 months ago

A poem is as a poem does ...

... and this one takes the reader gently by the hand to share for a moment your joy in this idyllic haven of peace and therapeutic tranquillity. In The Artist Speaks: "Listen well: he speaks with sweet breath - a zephyr in a tempest." ... this is the nearest I've seen to this in a poem - your voice a sweet zephyr in the tempest of our chaotic and infuriating world. I've often [reluctantly] had to stay in 5-star hotels - often barely deserving of one. Your magical dell is well worth five. Mike "not all matterings of mind equal one violet" ~ e e cummings ~

theladyblue

18 years 4 months ago

Mike

I cant even reply...to be compared to such words...thank you "For every shadow, no matter it's depth, is threatened by the morning's light..." <3 Emarie

blistered-pen

18 years 4 months ago

5 stars

the ending is awesome. I love it. p.s. big girl? everyone grows in their own time. feedback appreciated. also, your work is mind blowing. almost envious of how you pen those words. kudos.

theladyblue

18 years 4 months ago

thank you so much!

Honey my advice is merely this...it doesn't matter what you feel in your heart (age wise) you will never get years back and there will come a time you look back and wish you had smoked one more, kissed another, and cried just because. "For every shadow, no matter it's depth, is threatened by the morning's light..." <3 Emarie

barbsdad2003

18 years 3 months ago

Refreshments:

from dance to sleep ... and, ah, to wake ... to see, to feel ... to know: of cautious nymphs ahiding. You be blessed, I think, to so ably share such detail found in your sunny meadowland. And we (I) be blessed by the reading of it. Thanx, Chuck

Barbara Writes

18 years 3 months ago

great piece

Barbara Writes this is truly great. Realy enjoyed reading.

Candlewitch

18 years 3 months ago

Hello,

I love the subject matter and your style. This poem is enchanting! another fairy, pixie and nymph fan/Cat (Candlewitch)

Tink

17 years 7 months ago

i enjoyed visting your land

i enjoyed visting your land of peace and comfort, thank you for sharing it with me. i look forward to going more places through your mind's eyes.

infinite_dwarf

17 years 7 months ago

I agree with Tink

Nice, mystical write. It's pretty humbling to see nature in all of its glory. Unspoiled. Untamed. Truly a nice write. ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- -"If your mother still drives you to school, you ain't no 'gangsta', pull your damn pants up!" - Bill Engvall