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LOVE BECOMES PAIN

LOVE,

LOVE IS BLIND,

LOVE CAN TAK OVE YA MIND.

YA  LOVE CAN CONTROL U,

YA LOVE CAN SPLIT U  IN 2.

CUZ THE 1 U LOVE ,

MIGHT NOT LOVE U.

THEN THAT SO CALLED LOVE BECOMES

PAIN,

WHEN U HAV PAIN,

U ALWAYS FEELTHE RAIN.

CUZ THE LOVE U THOUGHT WAS TRUE,

DIDN'T REALLY WANT U.

HE WANTED THE MIDDLE OF U,

BUT ONCE U TURN THEM DOWN

THIER FAVORITE WORDS ARE..

WELL THEN B***H  F**K  U.

BUT IF U OPEN THE DOOR N LET THEM IN,

THE NEXT DAY THEY'LL BE GONE LIKE THE WIND.

THEN THAT SOOO CALLED LOVE BECOMES PAIN...

                                                                                                                            WRITTEN BY; SHAQUANA

— scooby, Feb 07, 2008

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Country/Region: yuma az

Favorite Poets: Neil Hilborn, Kevin Kantor,

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poewriter58

18 years 4 months ago

what is this

misspelled words , text message abbreviations poor grammar tak=take ove=over ya= your u=you 2=two cus=because 1=I and on and on I usually do not come down this hard on someones writing and try to find something good about it but sorry to say I just can't do it this time
weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 4 months ago

"Gangsta" spelling doesn't work

English is a powerful and profound language with the precision to say anything you want. Show me one example where gangsta or SMS spelling adds to a poem and I will eat my bottom. 8) Well try, anyway. But mostly what bothers me about this is the caps. I don't like being yelled at, do you? By the way, you don't need to censor here, fuck words etc are completely acceptable. This poem has heaps of passion and could be very good spelled correctly and re-written cheers, Jess
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Tragic_Bliss

18 years 3 months ago

if u..

lose the caps and it will sound so much better i know i had to do it on 3 of my own :P$DEY KNOW$
asiajy

asiajy

18 years 3 months ago

2Much 4Now

It's really strong. A little too strong. It feels like I'm being screamed at. And censoring is completely unnecessary. Ass. Fuck. Shit. Bitch. Whatever you feel will make it work. Also on this site alot of people thrive on grammatical errors, intentional or not.