Time goes round in a straight line

Circles, not ones and zeros in combinations and permutations that mean something to the machine, I concur. The natural path of life, the way we go, around and around. Fine sentiment. The eternal present indeed. As far as poetic commentary, I was floored by this, your use of style conveyed as much as the words and the ideas. The first stanza, organic, the second--the complaint--sculpted with machine like accuracy and pin-point words; then you return to the natural, the real, the man you obviously are. Really enjoyed that read, echoes sentiments I try to cultivate as well; for seeds need tending to complete their circles, machines just need batteries.

This is beautifully crafted. Deep and very very true. Loved it all the way and even more so because it made me think! Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.

well written. In ink, Dabbler

I could have sworn that I'd already left a comment about this one ... This piece flows like time itself. Every word fits perfectly. Expertly crafted, Jess. ~ Ronda

and beautifully crafted, Jess, I love this piece of timeless wordery. Lenny

Jess this is an excellent piece, it made me actually sit back and think and in doing so found you are so right! The first stanza has wonderful momentum. Chrys

I love it.

That makes you think! Nice idea. Kieran "Mind, how you go!" - Roger McGough's poem for LSD Awareness Week

but does it really matter? I'm smiling and when that happens I don't need to look any further or think any more but just enjoy the present. Thanks, Mark

and gemlike--i'd venture that it takes quite a bit of poetic discipline to write a poem like this successfully. i as an individual can actually sense your focus on the relativity and necessary cultural misrepresentations of time as you write it, which to my mind means success. great write--nothing to criticize here, actually. (i meditate and try to stay in the present, but it seems to me something that has to be constantly worked on, a lifetime task!)

this is amazing weirdelf I love how you brought to the readers attention the thing about the digital read outs i have a digital clock and a wristwatch with sweeper hands (thats what I call them) and I love your love of the marking of cycles Like Solcistice we had medicine wheels out west of gathered stones in a circle that pointed to stars etc thankfully You are a dedicated poet who writes important works like this O

Wonderful ... reminds me a little of Dr Who's tardis - so much bigger on the inside. A superb springboard from which to explore the exigencies of time. Mike "not all matterings of mind equal one violet" ~ e e cummings ~

Jess, first impression? Lovely work. Made me think. I like a poem that can do that. I also like how you kept your narrative concise all the way through the piece. I especially like how you ended it. This poem reminds me of an anthropological paper I once read about natives in Central Africa. When they discovered how Westerners kep time, they were horrified by the thought of the sheer mechanicization of the process, of chopping the day into tiny increments. They were terribly aghast at that concept. I am not too sure that they didn't have the right of it. Cheers mate! -DS Baker Off topic-I heard Russel Crowe give a toast. God Bless America, God Save the Queen, God protect New Zealand and Thank God for Australia. Good on ya mate!

wonderfully written, words fit perfectly.. I think as we get older we realize how fast life passes by, I know I do and the little wrinkles don't help Marie

I was once told - "there are no straight lines in nature" (my science teacher 7th grade)It was 1966 lol WOW, how times have changed moving forward in a strait line seeming faster or slower at times but I suppose that is human nature :) "Some things change,,,, Some things don't" (The Matrix) Jess, what time bring us certainly can be a present as in - your poetry. Mark

damn, that seems redundant hehe

You outdid yourself on this one. Put me right back in physics class! (j/k) Seriously, though: great subject / great flow / good golly mate / where did the time go? ~Lynn (Jess K.) ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ ~ "Bush is listening.... use big words!" ~ "Your inferiority complex is better than mine..."

I love the title, and the way the poem unravels, and then is tied up neatly at the end. I think the theme of time is incredible. Not sure about the 2nd line, I don't think it's needed, but thats me being pedantic. It's still great with it.

on holding both spots. AND THANK YOU! I was starting to think mine was permenatly there and that particular one of mine was not one of my favorite, Pleased to have it knocked off, even more so be it by you. Great write, Mark

Smiles:) Barbara Well written and flow well it doesn't impress me like your other poems, but is a good.

Smiles:) Barbara Well written and flow well it doesn't impress me like your other poems, but is a good. Congratulation on the spotlight and evolution. Great Poet and Writer

I am finally speechless. Very, very well written.