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Calliope
Feb 08, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Chance encounter

She couldn't know that she would meet her doom

That night she swayed into the pub

A scullery maid from Whitechapel

For her there would be no more floors to scrub

 

No more occasional aquaintences

For a couple extra francs

No more gossip with the cook

No more  walks along the banks

 

No more meetings with the sun

No more affairs with the moon

With  this one chance encounter

Death will meet her soon

 

He was charming and engaging

His eyes a mesmerizing chasm

And when his teeth grazed her skin

She gave a pleasurable little spasm

 

He spoke to her  soft words

Never spoken to her before

She thought she could fall in love

With this dark stranger who spoke to her core

 

He kissed her lips,carressed her skin, and arched her lovely neck

His touch turned rough, she turned to refuse,"please,"he said,"just a peck."

 

She turned and hesitantly relented

That's when his fangs extended

And all her hopes and dreams were ended.

 

 

 

 

 

 

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poewriter58

18 years 3 months ago

very well done

You have managed to combine two gruesome charaters into one poem When first reading I thought you were speaking of Jack The Ripper but no you went on to Dracule good rhyming in this work Chrys
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LadyTheresa

56 years 4 months ago

Chance Encounter

ladytheresa A very enjoyable read with nice flow and cadence. I found this piece to be engaging and entertaining. I especially liked the characters portrayed. All in all a great read! LadyTheresa :)
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Calliope

18 years 3 months ago

Question.

Do you think the end was a little anticlimactic?I think it lacks some ingenuity.What do think? Lacy, Where power corrupts,poetry cleanses.
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barbsdad2003

18 years 2 months ago

Just a thought:

I think just dropping the last stanza would leave the reader at sort of a cliff's edge, a proper place for a reader to be on this fine piece. Said another way, the maid's end has already become apparent, making the last stanza perhaps a tad redundant. Or overkill, if you'll pardon the pun. I think. Don't know, though, if you'd agree with my judgment here. Yours, Chuck
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Calliope

18 years 2 months ago

Thanx Chuck,

I think you may be right,the last stanza is a bit redundant.The point had already been made.Think I'll drop it and see what people think. Appreciate the constructive advice. It seemed a bit off to me and I think you caught it. Thanks, Lacy, Where power corrupts,poetry cleanses.