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Barbara Writes
Barbara Writes
Feb 03, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Wedding Vow

Our wedding day
Beautiful pink and white
Flowers

The love we shared
Laughter we behold
The dreams we had
Recaptured on our
Twenty-year anniversary

Joy of married life
Children one big family
We envision now a reality

The joys and passions
The love grew stronger
Together we bonded

Wedding vow repeated
To love and cherish
Today and forever
We recapture this special day

— Barbara Writes, Feb 03, 2008

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Region, Country: United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Billy Collins, Shakespeare, , Emily Dickinson, , , Whitman, Jess Tapper

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Mark

Mark

18 years 4 months ago

Punctuation

Barbara, hello ! I read your poem several times and realize that is because it seems to need a little punctuation. If I may? Wedding vow remembered; you are sort of starting a list so you need to signify that by this ; Wedding vow remembered; Our wedding day, (adding a comma makes it more logical) Children, one big family (again the comma) add an additional space after the comma (two spaces) in poetry it just works better :) When you say Wedding vow recapture do you mean loving and cherishing or ... recaptured, (comma) love and cherish Barbara, I really hope I am helpful and in the end it is your decisions and your poetry :) Truly, Mark
Mark

Mark

18 years 4 months ago

I shall return

I am hoping to see what you do witrh it, Barbara, Mark
Mark

Mark

18 years 4 months ago

Back

Barbara, I think this is so much more logical it is rather nice to read. You need to fix a few typos and I shall return. Were = We ? Twenth = Tenth ? Cheers Mark
Mark

Mark

18 years 4 months ago

work

You really worked on this Barbara :) It is great! Truly, Mark