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barbsdad2003
Feb 06, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Phone Dead

 

My phone since yesterday's

been on the friggin' blink.

 

It may be soundly dead,

I much too sadly think.

 

For now it's all afever

and it's long gone

 

abrupt to bed.

 

Although it seems

to be unconscious,

 

it perhaps may be

quite soon revivable ...

 

my hunch is.

 

  In the meantime,

it's makin' me

 

feelin' quite majorly

and mopin'ly

 

... deprivable,

I think it ought be said.

 

Here's hopin'

that the problem can be-

 

come survivable.

  

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Kieran Nelson

18 years 3 months ago

I nice take on modern day

I nice take on modern day life, but I have say I thought whatever humour could be derived was lost due to the overly complicated form. Kieran "Mind, how you go!" - Roger McGough's poem for LSD Awareness Week
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Mark

18 years 3 months ago

snails!

Hire a snail to carry some mail your message sent may not get there in a wink or blink maybe even squalkn and talkn will be back in style be they yet to reach the first mile or maybe smile you've got quiet the while
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Quillsvein1

18 years 3 months ago

i enjoyed

this, and your agony is more common than you might imagine: i remember a time when my phone was completely shut off--along with my internet connection. it can produce an odd, dislocated feeling or simple frustration (which is aired very well in the poem, though the structure halts it a little bit.) at the same time, though, it gives you a psychic window on to what one really is in solitude. good job!
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meic

18 years 3 months ago

I read this with unconcealed

I read this with unconcealed glee ... If there's any invention I could uninvent it would be the telephone. I'm so glad mobile phones weren't around when I was young - I would HATE to be so available! Mike "not all matterings of mind equal one violet" ~ e e cummings ~
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LadyTheresa

56 years 4 months ago

How true, how true...

I especially liked your piece and found myself full giggle! What did we ever do before we had phones??? I enjoy your playful nature in your poetry! Yours, LadyTheresa
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barbsdad2003

18 years 3 months ago

I confess ...

to off-line post-posted regret ... and intended to delete this piece that was writ too hastily ... and not well enough to meet my quirky standards. But I see it's caught some interest ... and a few smiles. So unless I decide to rewrite (or delete) it later, I'll just leave well enough alone. Chuck PS: Phone's back on now, as evidenced by a few unwanted political-hack calls received---and, of course, calls from telemarketers that don't abide the Do Not Call List (which I think, by the way, is a joke ... and way too stupid: The powers that be should have in its stead an "I Want to Be Called List" so that anyone not voluntarily listed's not to be pestered!) And to respond to Meic's possible question: Yes, I have land line only. No mobile or cell (meaning phone, not jail; although having a cell phone can, I suspect, hold one a prisoner---and thus feel sort of like being held behind bars) for me. Besides, I haven't the foggiest notion how to operate a cell phone. And if I did, since it's so small, I'd probably just lose it somewhere. PSS: Sorry to show off, but my amazing memory allows me to remember my home-phone number when I attended fifth grade in elementary school in another state: 382.
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LadyTheresa

56 years 4 months ago

Always a Pleasure

Chuck, Smiles to you this morning!!! I have to say that your commentary and your works have brought smiles to me here in Texas. Thank you for that!! LadyTheresa Oh, By the way.. My fave cat is affectionatley known as Carlos...lol!!!
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barbsdad2003

18 years 3 months ago

Thank you, thank you!

By the way, let me introduce you to Buster, the pet park-rescued white duck of my profile pic. He's a very happy duck usually, except for a few misgivings from time to time about being left out too long in what for him's uncomfortably deep snow. He loves kids, attention, extra firm tofu, Cheerios, night crawlers (fresh and wriggling live), water, and wild-bird seed---not necessarily in that order. We keep him in the house generally, but let him go outside to play while we watch carefully for salivating neighborhood hawks and transient coyotes, including one lean coyote possessing a startlingly beautiful all-charcoal-black coat. Chuck
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LadyTheresa

56 years 4 months ago

LOL!!!

Pleased to make your aquaintance, Buster!!! LadyT