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Feb 05, 2008
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"When there's a flaming/Variation
Johann Christian Friedrich Holderlin (1770-1843)
Original:
"When there's a flaming above the night
And black as coal
And the vineyard looks, around the
Autumn season, because
More fierily the pipes of life
In the grapevine's shadows. But
Lovely is it to unfold
The soul and our brief life"
Variation:
When there's a flaming above the night
And quickly doused with black resin
The city breaks even, hoarding around
the faceless heads
because they look divine
in the porcelain camera light
of the 6:00 news. Rushed inside,
looking down or up
we know our stray shapes possible
for notice in the careless shadows,
and breathe again
Comments
RSScheerer
18 years 2 months ago
both are amazing