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Nightmare Sonnet

I just awoke from a horrible dream

Many monstrous deeds I did without feel

I gaze at a mirror with a crazed scream

This has to be a dream; it can't be real.

My lover's falling out of love with me

As he taunts me within the unknown's arms

How could I be so blind as not to see?

My body does a horrid deal of harm

I sink into a deep shade of bright red

Where is it all coming from? I wonder

Too late for apologies to be said

I fall into the lightning and thunder.

Maybe sometimes you hurt the ones you love

I wake covered in my lover's blood.

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Region, Country: Philadelphia, USA

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe

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poewriter58

18 years 3 months ago

suggestions

second line "I did without feel" if I'm understanding this line you are saying you committed this crime without knowing it if that is what is meant then state it more clearly pacing I felt was choppy there wasn't an even tone to the poem Overall concept of the poem is quite good but could have been presented more effectively