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Images of love

Across the room a candle burns,

Cold spirit of a dying flame -

Alone upon a wasteland.

 

Slumped among distorted shadows

With eyes half-closed by drink,

My dreams have twisted in the light

That threads her picture on the wall,

And I have listened,

Listened for her footstep in the hall.

 

Or walking on a street at night

I recognise a figure lit

In the deep and empty pool

Of amber thrown around a face,

And then looked again

To see a stranger take her place.

 

Or lying sprawled across a bar

I hear her voice call softly,

Call out above the raucous crowd.

But as my stupor quickly clears

I stare about my ears deceived

My smoke-filled eyes half-blind with tears.

 

Or drunk, returning to my room

I contemplate a hopeless love

And watch her silent face appear

Within the sharp blue-fingered flame

And wonder,

Wonder if she knows my name.

 

Or when she beckons me to wake

And move her with a laughing kiss,

I stretch and blow her face away;

For in the flame a dreamer's mind

Can see her still,

But know what it can never find.

 

Across the room a candle dies,

Cold remnant of a lifeless flame -

Alone upon a wasteland.


— professor, Jan 26, 2008

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: China/Sichuan/Chengdu, CHN

Favorite Poets: Yeats, Elliot, Auden, Keats, Shelley, Byron

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poewriter58

18 years 4 months ago

Perfect

I can hardly find the words to describe the excellent way you use your words When I read something that I true am captivated by my eyes are riveted to the page , and all five senses are at work . Your writing is one of the few that has this affect on me
professor

professor

18 years 4 months ago

Images of love

Thanks again Chrys, I am both honoured and flattered by your praise. K
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cricket

18 years 4 months ago

Excellent

Excellent write poet... Words flow across the page... sad and yet beautiful.. great word usage here friend. cricket
professor

professor

18 years 4 months ago

Images of love

Thankyou so much for your positive comments Cricket. Trying something new as you can see. K
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purplemoondoll

18 years 4 months ago

This is beautifully written.

This is beautifully written. The images are crystal clear and play beautifully as I read. I like the way you tell the story. I particularly like the third and closing stanzas. Welcome once again - I really look forward to seeing more of your work. Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.
professor

professor

18 years 4 months ago

Story teller

I will post more gradually I promise....thanks for the appreciative comments. I wrote this one quite a while ago but even now as i read it again the emotions that led to it seem as fresh and painful as they were then. K
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Calliope

18 years 4 months ago

Haunting and beautiful!

You definately have a way with words .You really put the reader there,feeling those things,seeing those things.All I can say is awesome! Don't stop writing with that kind of talent. Bravo! Lacy, Where power corrupts,poetry cleanses.
professor

professor

18 years 4 months ago

Images

Thanks for such positive comments Lacy I will have plenty more to share as time goes by. K
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fthillsboomer

18 years 4 months ago

Great

I'd really love to hear this read out loud. Intensely, darkly, evocative. If you're gonna feel this way you might as well get all the way in. Loved it!
professor

professor

18 years 4 months ago

Read out loud

Thanks for your appreciation. It does sound great read out loud I agree although pretty sad, dark and depressing as i'm sure you can imagine. Keith