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purplemoondoll
Jan 24, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Revolving Echoes

Fatigue with subtle Fingers stroke my mind. Rest my thoughts, expel The endless round of Voices in my head.   Revolving echoes. Nothing leads to Something leads to Nothing ..STOP IT!   Dead silence. Drift on waves to dreaming.   Gently Fall to   Sleep.    
— purplemoondoll, Jan 24, 2008

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barbsdad2003

18 years 3 months ago

This Piece ...

could only have been written by one who's been there to have the experience described so well. Thanx again, Chuck
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gwizardstar

18 years 3 months ago

Title

I think the title is excellent Kaz, soon as I read the title I knew I would relate to the poem. I've suffered from depression and this poem describes my nights laid in bed unable to switch off my brain. BRILLIANT.
Electric Blue

Electric Blue

18 years 2 months ago

Revlving Echoes

Well my friend i think like you my mind wanders so and cannot make any sense of the day and night dreams. I cannot switch ofso sleep is hard to come but eventually i drift on the cosmic flow the colours of the universe to explore. Dead silences drift on waves to dreaming just love this line but i drift whether it is night or day awesome Maggie R
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purplemoondoll

18 years 3 months ago

I can relate to that so

I can relate to that so well. Thanks for your feedback :-) Funnily enough since writing this I havent had too many sleepless nights heh heh maybe this was the antidote. :-) Cheers Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.
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Ancientone

18 years 4 months ago

Restless I'd say!

Hope you did sleep well my dear friend. Well written expose of a restless night, good imagery and form. :) Patrick/AO
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Calliope

18 years 4 months ago

Another...

...Lovely peice .Your excellent at capturing a moment.I always look forward to more of your stuff. Lacy, Where power corrupts,poetry cleanses.
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purplemoondoll

18 years 4 months ago

When the mind is spinning

When the mind is spinning its a nightmare to make it sleep. Luckily it doesnt happen too often. Thanks for your comments everyone they are very much appreciated.:-)
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drowned-in-emotions

18 years 4 months ago

Simply beautiful and

Simply beautiful and elegant. You are very talented.
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

18 years 4 months ago

comment

Hey you took the thoughts right out of my head before relaxing and letting go! Loved the title
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orgami

18 years 3 months ago

emergency brake

"drift on waves to dreaming.." Loved that line can sure relate to this the round and round like chambered shells all that potential bound up and the final stop myself i take medications to sleep anti psychotics sleep meds mood disorder meds and then i get sleep sometimes Love this poem (your work always gets my interest) O
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purplemoondoll

18 years 3 months ago

Thanks O

I can relate - About ten years ago I suffered from depression and the medication really didnt help at all - a change of lifestyle did.:-) Thanks for your support and feedback my friend - its very much appreciated. There is something about this poetry form that appears to work in terms of drawing the reader into the theme/moments like this. I think I will be experimenting with it a little more in the future! :-) Cheers - Kaz :-) It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.
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barbsdad2003

18 years 3 months ago

Somewhat Like Org here ...

I find that at least once per while I must get a purple ... fix---and check your profile to see what new thing you've created for posting. Thanx, Chuck
atorn

atorn

18 years 3 months ago

great title

the title pulled me in and the poem lived up to the expectations promised by the title ive spent many a restless night with mind racing and this piece captured it perfectly
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purplemoondoll

18 years 3 months ago

Thanks Zandrew

For reading and commenting - very much appreciated! And welcome once again to the site! :-) Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.
themoonman

themoonman

18 years 3 months ago

Hiya moondoll...

Those nights are terrible but I do like your poem...great title like the zman said...draws you in...
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purplemoondoll

18 years 3 months ago

Thanks Moonman :-)

For the comments very much appreciated as always :-) Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.