Prodigal Returning

won't you tell me I

have not lost my soul!

I am on the way back

from around the bend

back into the languid pools

and the billowy breezes

that sing spontaneous songs

in cool of the afternoon

-- such sounds lift the spirit

bringing a peace and serenity

against the cruel hardness

and the crashing discordant sounds

of this torpid confusing world

— crypticbard, Jan 23, 2008

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: West Moreton, AUS

Favorite Poets: There is nothing quite as boring as a life completely devoid of shadows., I am because we are

Critiques

poewriter58

18 years 4 months ago

Reading your poem was like

Reading your poem was like watching a movie that is to be continued , beautiful wording, for example languid pools and billowy breezes , just sets the reader up for an enjoyable reading. the entire poem has a calm undertone a lulling quality . My only objection was it was too short I was just letting myself be carried away with it's soothing flow and it ended abruptly very nicely written

Frederick Kesner

18 years 4 months ago

Thanks

The first line of your comment confirms to me the visual nature of the process of my writing. The objection on brevity is a feedback I have received as well. And I have written and will post some of my longer and more 'complete' poems. I guess this one is an example of an episodic or still shot poem which expresses a feeling more than the living out of an experience. The prodigal returns and this is like that one breathe to bolster his/her resolve to return home as the first step through the threshold is made.