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IKnowNoBox
Jan 20, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Septic Kisses

become my despised

that hand

urgently creepy

oozes across 

a petrified belly

singes pubic hairs

sick has need

to take away

every feel

yet felt

 

amateur slang

attempts to

lay at ease

fight or flight

ripped away

resistant hands

with only thought

 

peeled-off garments

shells of modesty

tossed aside

kept to cover-up

invisible marks

calluses to be

 

secluded body

mishandled flesh

took with threats

without force

to resist

that septic kiss

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

— IKnowNoBox, Jan 20, 2008

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Region, Country: East Coast, USA

Favorite Poets: Weird Elf, Shel Silverstein, The Poet Anonymous

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waterdragon

18 years 4 months ago

Well, that's nice and

creepy! You convey "yuck" really well! BTW: Do you mean "ripe away resistant hands" or "rip away resistant hands"? Glad you're my newest buddy! Reverend Bec Hudson Shine Your Light It's the ONLY Way to Get Rid of the Darkness!
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IKnowNoBox

18 years 4 months ago

yes I did thank you

i thought i had added you sometime ago.I have been on a profile reading frenzy.there are many new members to read up on. In ink, dabbler
themoonman

themoonman

18 years 4 months ago

I like it...

shells of modesty tossed aside...some great lines in this dark little write...cool.
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IKnowNoBox

18 years 4 months ago

Tainted Touch

was the first title but Septic Kisses come out a lot stronger thanks Moon M. In ink, Dabbler
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purplemoondoll

18 years 4 months ago

Septic Kisses

Really works as a title. This left me feeling really dirty and longing for a warm bath -excellent. a petrified belly singes pubic hairs Ouch! Loved this Dabbler. Kaz x It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.
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IKnowNoBox

18 years 4 months ago

Thank you Kaz

those two verses come from an interesting origin I will tell you about in message. In ink, david
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Calliope

18 years 4 months ago

David

I know interpretation of poetry is to the reader ,but I would like to know your interpretation of this one. To me it seems about a raping that took place ,was this correct? I really felt this one ,being a victim myself ,those feelings are pretty accurate .I applaude this one for the understanding of this kind of terrible tragedy if that is what its about.That is my interpretation Lacy, Where power corrupts,poetry cleanses.
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

18 years 4 months ago

Really good

I too thought it was about rape. never raped, but my sister was molested as a child and raped as an adult.
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IKnowNoBox

18 years 4 months ago

Sadly that is statistical

Thank you for your comment.The two are separated only by the degree of force.A nudge vs. a fist. In ink, dabbler
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

18 years 4 months ago

Hello

Your finely constructed poem really hit home for me, as a survivor. I think the tone and message were darkly excellent and the images were sadly supurb. The five stare rateing is greatly deserved. Candlewitch
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IKnowNoBox

18 years 4 months ago

Thank you Septic

relates the feeling that is hard to overcome,a toast to survival! In ink, David
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winterrain

18 years 3 months ago

“Septic kisses” To have

"Septic kisses" To have one explain the dirt of an event sooo... well, is quite crazy. This piece unfolds to such a gruesome ending "septic kisses" and the entire last stanza. Just the thought of how many people are exposed to such events, (and you have written such an amazing piece!!!)goes to show that being victimized should be....spoken about. THIS IS AWARENESS.Great job.5 stars!!!! well deserved.
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IKnowNoBox

18 years 3 months ago

Thank you Winter Rain

That is one of the differences between being a victim and a survivior.The talking part. In ink, Dabbler
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vonnegutfan

18 years 3 months ago

Still rather new here, so I

Still rather new here, so I have found myself wondering the stream several times a day like a kid in a candy store. In doing so I have come across several poets that are true artisan wordsmiths. You have some great work, and I absolutely love your dark side. Great read!
infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

18 years 1 month ago

I agree with Kaz...

You definitely feel like taking a shower after reading this. It was creepy, and just makes you shudder. I hope the darkest pits of hell await anyone who has ever done this to someone. Great poem. ~Jess ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ "Johnny was a chemist's son, but Johnny is no more. What Johnny thought was H2O, was really H2SO4."
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IKnowNoBox

18 years 1 month ago

Thank you Jess

it is my third go at the theme.I took the elements that worked from the others and adjusted lenght.The initial reaction to molestation and rape victims comes I feel from the lack of direct address simular to secret societies.Who would want to talk of such things... without fearing offense to the comfort zone of others.If cult victims didn't right about what went on in the cult (however grussom and demeaning it is,others would be without a "heads up" If one person Is dispelled by the creepy operation of a potential molest/rapist advances then this poem has earned its ink. In ink, Dabbler BTW Dig the quote.