A diamond in a pebble

Those are the first two words that come to mind when reading this. There are some places where I think a different word choice could strengthen the poem, especially where there seems to be a confusion of tenses. I'm going to offer some suggestions by posting a revised version below. By doing this I do not mean to imply that you should change your work; this is merely offered as my advice. You take or leave what you would like. "She speaks and smiles like a star cheering me from my darkness Her words and smiles are a balm curing my pains and ills She may come from a poor pebble but she is a diamond among us Our home may be thatched by leaves but it is her palace of love and glee Her dresses may be old and stitched but she walks and talks like a princess I may be the poor father of that angel but her best half will be from heaven I will pray and call for Him to come and realise the dreams of this poor father" I mean no offense by offering you these suggestions, only ideas that may be of some use to you. Thank you for sharing ~ Ronda