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Determination

The day was gray and solemn

a gloom hung in the air.

And no one seemed to care.

I felt uneasy

as I searched around for a friend.

 

My breathing became labored

and the cold did chill my bones.

The pathway was made of stones,

and that helped my footing,

for to stumble, I could not afford.

 

I noticed up above me,

that the sky had lit up the night.

And my journey ahead seemed allright,

but I was lonely

even though I was finally free.

 

Now I have adjusted my pace,

to accommodate others I know.

Whose movements seem awkward and slow.

My legs feel renewed,

and a look of dertimination is worn upon my face.

— docmaverick, Jan 18, 2008

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Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

Favorite Poets: Keates, Poe, Dickinson, and Dr. Seuss. There are a smattering of others, but why bother listing 'em all, ya know?, I also rely on a few of our poets, here....for advice, and what not. I couldn't possibly explain what a fountain of live, effective knowledge we have...right here in our midst ! To catch a glimmer of brilliance, merely visit: the Stream.

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cricket

18 years 4 months ago

The word usuage

The word usuage in this poem is excellent, and the flow is good, it shows determination very well, as we all have our path of stones we walk, from the darkness into the light,,,wonderfully done. cricket