Your Call

among the stars

into the spotlight

to the curtain soaked stage

one moment ...

may I hold your hand ?

— IKnowNoBox, Jan 15, 2008

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: East Coast, USA

Favorite Poets: Weird Elf, Shel Silverstein, The Poet Anonymous

Critiques

Quillsvein1

18 years 4 months ago

i take

this as more of an experimental piece on your part, though i may be wrong--a desperate plea for human communication and understanding, perhaps? the last two lines are beautifully compelling: "on the curtain soaked stage/one moment/may i hold your hand?" this has an enigmatic, mysterious quality to it, and makes the reader wonder. i think you've done better, but still find this strangely compelling. great job!

IKnowNoBox

18 years 4 months ago

when I wrote this I thought ...

stars=talent when the fans get to the spotlight...fumble may take from this poem great comments very helpful I have revisioned it but will wait for a better title.A curtain soaked stage referes to the first time I was on a stage with a large crowd and it felt like i was brushing the most sufficating material in my life...one moment please is a pause to steady and ready to enter the stage.Or the fans way of making contact with the "star".so talented fans performing with a star watching...also I have been doing a forum for star voting as well.So any suggestions for title would help.Sometimes mentors need to be there to steady the up and coming with something as simple as a steady hand.So the spotlight feels dry and breezy. In ink, Dabbler

theladyblue

18 years 4 months ago

Fumble...Almost but not quiet?

I really is a lovely short but honestly I am a little thrown by the title...I understand that titles are subjective and so I can pull my own little theory out of workshoping poets and whatnot however I really just want to know your thoughts leading to the title... "For every shadow, no matter it's depth, is threatened by the morning's light..." <3 Emarie

Longor4

18 years 4 months ago

hmmnnnn....

appreciation, spirituality, definitely romantic, circumstantial..are all possible catagories of which your poem has the ability of appilicability...in keeping with the circumstance of the stage and to lend an open invitation to varied applications of content...I offer my thought as an example title... Your Call Thank you very much for allowing freedom in the reading of this poem. Longor4

IKnowNoBox

18 years 4 months ago

Wow and thank you L4

I think you helped open the curtain. In ink, Dabbler

SLoEDdie

18 years 4 months ago

always a fan of the short and strong poems

it made me feel, feel the lonliness of "stardom" and how everyone can know and love you yet not know you and never love you. when the day is done you can miss the hand to hold. I dont know if this is close to what it was about but it made me feel this, great poem. Ed

IKnowNoBox

18 years 4 months ago

Wow Ed you nailed it ...

You Said stated that so well...also how when a person feels they need improvement or study yet all they get is routine reviews.Among the stars there is more critical reviews and one must earn the spotlight you can always spot a mentor among talent...whatch the late shows and notice when an up and coming talent sits next to or talks about mentors or Spot light Actors, Among Stars So a hand to guide or steady the performer before curtain call.We just got a Mentorship Program here and I look forward to some instructive critiques. My friend said this poem made him think of a fan seeking a star...I think you got it much better. In ink, Dabbler