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IKnowNoBox
Jan 14, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

A Poem in Error

was the breeze strong?

a serum of words fluid

across a page into a ...

compressioned gasp

a freshened breath

written uni-verse

— IKnowNoBox, Jan 14, 2008

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Region, Country: East Coast, USA

Favorite Poets: Weird Elf, Shel Silverstein, The Poet Anonymous

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RSScheerer

RSScheerer

18 years 4 months ago

something

seems incomplete here. This piece is a bit obscure. I think that some of it may be grammatical, e.g. "accost" - across? "freshen" - freshened? Could you clarify a bit for my addled brain so that I may properly comment, David? Thanks so much ~ Ronda
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IKnowNoBox

18 years 4 months ago

Yes indeed it is a poem in Error

I wrote not a word...but close enough to a word and spell checked.I meant to put something at the end but ran out of time...so your comment was and is spot on.serum fluid accost the page... serut acast the pagi I believe. Ink in, Dabbler
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orgami

18 years 4 months ago

iengowhwtg-wei

love this poem sometimes something incomplete framed up crashed together moulded simpleness exists therefore am I? O
RSScheerer

RSScheerer

18 years 4 months ago

simplicity

Ah, now I can appreciate this in all its simple beauty. The editor in me rests. ~ Ronda