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A thought by Sinbad the Sailor Man

— Sinbadthesailorman, Jan 14, 2008

About the Author

Region, Country: U.S. A. Indiana, Valparaiso, USA

Favorite Poets: Robert Frost, Walt Whitman, Samuel Taylor Coleridge, Carl Sandburg these I have read some And so Many More. I have no Favorite or any that I dislike. Whom I consider to be poets; of course there are many Dark and hateful souls, who would cry out and to I will lend an ear, but some. They just leave a awful taste in my heart that I can not bear to read twice. Let alone as many times I would do normally; as I must.

Critiques

Seren

16 years 11 months ago

Change the shes to he and

Change the shes to he and the wife to husband and I hear ya Sinbad ... I can see your reaching in this one and its wonderful I think if you spilt the lines up and made more lines out of the longer lines ? it would make it easier to read but I think it would also give it more meaning ... the lines going longer chopped some of the flow(for me) but others may disagree wait till you get a second opinion, is my opinion LOL ... but still a great write I loved it !! :) regards Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...

Sinbadthesailorman

16 years 11 months ago

I guess you could subsitute the she for the he But, then it

would belong to thee, and not me. Thanks for the comment and the suggestions. I would of left it,alone. For I simply forget what is easier for the reader, I prefer to make them work at it a bit I guess? Or I just don't reconize that it would be easier for them to read in a differant format. Thanks again Sinbad the Sailor Man/Donnie

Candlewitch

16 years 11 months ago

Donnie

What Jayne said, and... I love your new picture, it really cracked me up! Always, Cat

Sinbadthesailorman

16 years 11 months ago

Hey thanks cat I found it on a free site some where and

Had to have it. I feel this way about my self some times but, I so reconize that many of us are as silly as this simple creature. With are heads buried deep in the sand or some where a little worst. LOL Thanks again Cat, Donnie/Sinbad

Rett

16 years 11 months ago

Yay Donnie

Good one. It can work either way! Awesome. I agree with Jayne's suggestions, but I love the poem! Respectfully, Rett: "When I was born I was so surprised I didn't talk for a year and a half." Gracie Allen

Sinbadthesailorman

16 years 11 months ago

Thanks Rett, You gotta love that Gracie Allen And George Burns

I did and do, She was so silly as a simpleton but, I believe I read some where she was quite the interlectual and very smart too "L" Glad you liked it. this poem, it has been around for a while. I changed it some and I think it works better in this format. So thank you all for helping me out. Donnie/Sinbad

themoonman

16 years 11 months ago

Donnie...

ain't it funny how a child can see something so clearly... I have to agree with Jayne's suggestion to arrange your sentences so the thoughts are together, instead of lapsing over to the next one... but other than that, this was a very good read. Richard

Sinbadthesailorman

16 years 11 months ago

Yeah, this was done a long time ago

I made some changes and it was brought back into the stream, I took the suggestion from Jayne and the others to heart and have changed the format some. Thanks for the read and the comment. Richard/Moonman out of the mouths of babes they do have a way of pointing out the obvivous don't they? Those little monsters, angels that they are.

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