Depression mental cancer

Tired of life toils
Eclipse oppose sunshine
Dark cloud shape rain falls
Quiet storm materialize
Asphyxia candle light
Lava fume below the terrain
Raindrops above the firmament
Whitecaps bowl my oceanfront
Undiscerning world siesta
Hearts comfort sunken
Introverted moon loss its luster
Rainbow defeated

— Barbara Writes, Jan 13, 2008

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Region, Country: United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Billy Collins, Shakespeare, , Emily Dickinson, , , Whitman, Jess Tapper

Critiques

purplemoondoll

18 years 4 months ago

Good imagery use

I liked the pictures you have painted here. Depression is indeed a mental cancer. I am not able to comment on the mechanics of this poem but I think you captured the subject well. Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.

Barbara Writes

18 years 4 months ago

Thanks

I wanted to share its horrible side with discriptive words

IKnowNoBox

18 years 4 months ago

these verses stand out if there was to be revisioning ...

these lines should stay the same.I look forward to more insight on this poem great use of the theme. 'Quiet storm materialize Asphyxia candle light Lava fume below the terrain' In ink, Dabbler