Sacred Moment

and the second begins that way as well. Somewhere in those last three lines it lost its impact for me, though. I like the mirroring structure you've created. A suggestion for your conclusion: and yet a still forgotten death remains I think it makes a stronger conclusion. Basically saying the same thing you already have, just with a little more emphasis. If you do decide to leave it the way it is, check your spelling on "their." It should be "there" in this case. Great work, Lenny. I knew I'd be watching for more from you. ~ Ronda