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Barbara Writes
Barbara Writes
Jan 12, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Last Chance

Like storms from the sea
Mother's love takes defeat
Trouble child goes to jail
Hearts crush by hail

Talents and gifts posses
total waste at best
Love of crime nucleus
reasoning clueless

Bad decisions unwise
Portrait of lies
Come home to love ones
another chance to behold

Follow the moon light
Give up the fight
Prison stalks
your soul walks

 

— Barbara Writes, Jan 12, 2008

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Region, Country: United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Billy Collins, Shakespeare, , Emily Dickinson, , , Whitman, Jess Tapper

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RSScheerer

RSScheerer

18 years 4 months ago

Sad but true

Your tale is all too often told. My own mother has experienced this story with my brother. I hope that I never face it with my own sons. There are a few rough spots where your rhyme and pacing seem to lose some of their stamina. Maybe reading it aloud to yourself will help you hear them and offer some ideas for editing. I'm murder on my own work, so don't mind when I speak of editing! You have conveyed emotions that obviously strike true with me. This is what poetry is about. Nicely done. ~ Ronda