BEING WITH YOU GIVES ME WINGS

love this poem its sweet and straight to the point just to prove there are as many good ways to write expresive happy poems about good love as there are to write bad love nice I like it O

I don't see the need for all caps here though I would take the caps as away to show your reader that you are expressing volume or shouting it all caps would imply yelling to me was this your intenion your hands on my body it fits every nice line I can visulize it easily third paragrah you got everything needed here to show your reader what you want them to see maybe try a different order here Like [ you are the wont who kept me in the skies being with you makes me happy being with you gives me wings You are the one who help me FLY] But these are only sugestions it stands well now And I see things in reverse quite offten so things apear differntly to me then others so I must change things around to make sense to me then back to the way the writer intends for me to see It is a chore I seldom would do when I was younger but I find it a benifit now when trying to write poems and short stories nice goob Donnie/ Sinbad