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IKnowNoBox
Jan 02, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Un-Structured

 tracked worn tattered

 once art deco-ed out

sad estate

break-in ruined adobe

streched out  rafters

numerous dust bunnies

just run about

long candy lite halls

sway  groan joints

settle sedimented pipes

nude with paint stains

oh sad

not habitable?

 

— IKnowNoBox, Jan 02, 2008

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Region, Country: East Coast, USA

Favorite Poets: Weird Elf, Shel Silverstein, The Poet Anonymous

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TheRealTearsICry

18 years 5 months ago

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i liked it. ~RealTears
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purplemoondoll

18 years 5 months ago

$1.00?

I have never heard of that happening in the UK. i guess planning legislation and red tape prevent that - I could be wrong. There are some good observations made here:- long candy lite halls sway groan joints settle sedimented pipes nude with paint stains I liked this! The title is great. Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.
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IKnowNoBox

18 years 5 months ago

Thank you Kaz

$1.00 plus building relocation cost...the property is now a new parcel. 6 rooms and 2 living areas.A buyer would have to get land to put it on first(there are only two lots near there.) In ink, Dabbler
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winterrain

18 years 5 months ago

unstructured????

why was the title unstructured? DUE to the soon demolition of this building? I could feel a sence of beauty, and the sadness that something needs just alittle improvement to be deemed habitable. I think the pace of this was a little like heart strings pulling. love it ending with a ? like who is the judge of this. great write. raina
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winterrain

18 years 5 months ago

un-structured

I think it is great like it is, makes the reader want to ask ????(questions)