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IKnowNoBox
Dec 31, 2007 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Her Deepest Tremor

          aroused at her core

      molten pressure triggered

    optimal pressure increases

steam escape velocity extreme

     plate structure agitation

fissure motion

     set to...-_

                                -- - shift jarrr!!!!!

     roll-symphonic  jack  hammers

           jolt- /sway... not-rock-ab'a

 rock a-city-- -seismic  s- ---  - hu - d

d-e - --  er - -

Calm to discombobulate'/disor'der

       re secure civil structure...

       until she shakes again

            

— IKnowNoBox, Dec 31, 2007

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Region, Country: East Coast, USA

Favorite Poets: Weird Elf, Shel Silverstein, The Poet Anonymous

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Calliope

18 years 5 months ago

This is ...

...extremely interesting. The style and flow are most unique.I really like this piece. Lacy, Where power corrupts,poetry cleanses.
DF

D. Fizzle

18 years 5 months ago

=)

I like your title but it's pretty literal. I was hoping for something better. I don't know I guess I'm a sucker for the not usually seen words. Something that puts you there the minute you read it. A word that has so much power the readers must read it immediately. But I love the poem!! =D. Fizzle
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barbsdad2003

18 years 5 months ago

A Great Reflection of ...

an occurrence as it's happ'nin'. Somehow makes it funny (to me). Maybe 'cause I'm nervous remembering my own experience. While it happened, I had not an inkling it would end. It did, of course. Unless it didn't. Could be my body/brain just got used to it ... and it's still going on. Hard to tell. Don't trust myself anymore. Thanx, Chuck
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Conect11

18 years 5 months ago

stylish,

sexy, and damn boy! Even the structure itself is shapely and erotic. I wish I read it by red lamp light, or lava light, maybe. Mark W.
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IKnowNoBox

18 years 5 months ago

Thanks Mark,

Whats a good meal to eat by a lava lamp,overlooking the Haight Street(Hip scene in San Fransico know for earthquake damage) from a gallery/commune?Glad you like it look forward to some postings from you soon. In ink, Dabbler
Mark

Mark

18 years 5 months ago

Yeah lol

Maybe Orgas-Trickheaving Earth or someting like like that but the title as it stands works for me :) Damn, an erotic earthquake lmao
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IKnowNoBox

18 years 5 months ago

Well mark this one was revisioned and I want to invite you to

view it to see the subtle changes that made the most impact...all stirred by D.Fizzle.A poet as well as an insightful critic.I took the (...)out for the --- - and it gave it more in the dade dadda ...and the title change as well.So I give her the first Out of the Box Award for A valuable comment. In ink, Dabbler
Mark

Mark

18 years 5 months ago

Oh yeah !

looks like all the right moves :) Hopefully D. Fizzle will drop by my profile sometime and give me a nightmare to deal with but I know I will learn alot if I am in fact honored. ... __ _ hmm I likes, . . . is so old :) But then I need to drop by and read D Fizzle (soon) lol (am holding on to an e mail with that name on it :) Truly, Mark
theladyblue

theladyblue

18 years 5 months ago

Aroused at her core...shame shame

well being a lady of hourglass proportions I definitely appreciate her curves!!! This piece rocks my perverbial world in a little more than a literal sense...for me a double meaning persists and I'm ok with that...lol Nicely done!!! "For every shadow, no matter it's depth, is threatened by the morning's light..." <3 Emarie
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VAMPIREBLONDE

18 years 1 month ago

your words

I find it most interesting...with special secret codes for the observant eye.