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IKnowNoBox
Dec 30, 2007 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Grime

reach for edges crumbled

powdered gritty grayish

held out hands chapped

crevasse cozy child

smeary dream portal

craned neck audio

passer-by swirls

noticeable indifference

stale oxygen whoop

motivational regards

cuddled into rusty hovels

 

— IKnowNoBox, Dec 30, 2007

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Region, Country: East Coast, USA

Favorite Poets: Weird Elf, Shel Silverstein, The Poet Anonymous

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RSScheerer

RSScheerer

18 years 5 months ago

Great presentation

This is the type of poetry that appeals to me the most. There's a structure somewhere within the lack of structure and the words whirl around in my head in a spectrum of images. This sounds weak, but it's just very, very good work and I really enjoyed reading it (several times). ~ Ronda
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IKnowNoBox

18 years 5 months ago

Glad you liked it RondaI started this by thinking of

the "appearance" of civilians and cities above the surface.It will take your breath away the pollutants that settle into every city orifice,feeling it,seeing it tasting it,smelling it,and yes hearing it...as static. Grit style for offal. In ink, Dabbler
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pinksheep

18 years 5 months ago

Grime

All I can say in very simple words is this is a tremendous , superb and great poem, you are extremely talented . Thank you Lesley
theladyblue

theladyblue

18 years 5 months ago

ideal pollution...

complexly simple...i love the pull your words have on my mind...dreams have no escape and words twist in their chains "For every shadow, no matter it's depth, is threatened by the morning's light..." <3 Emarie
theladyblue

theladyblue

18 years 5 months ago

Many thanks

and of course, you are forever welcome! "For every shadow, no matter it's depth, is threatened by the morning's light..." <3 Emarie