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Under the Knife

  the tubes attached, the fluid dripping the beeps repeating and coinciding with my heart the pain subsiding the dreams occurring   medicine injected calms my nerves and soothes the pain in a freezing room with everything metallic the mask comes down my eyes close I open up and get rearranged   awakening to the dizziness dry mouth and a cloudy head returning from the dead it seems the pain comes back and stabs at me but one day I will walk normal and be like I was before everything broke before you left before I cared everything will be perfect but not today, I need months of rehab however that's nothing compared to the recovery from you   my insides ache and I cant concentrate the medicine keeps my mind from attaching to anything and stops the pain from occurring my eyes close I am under the knife
— washing tears, Dec 28, 2007

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Region, Country: sandusky, ohio, USA

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CROWNED WITH LAURELS

18 years 5 months ago

Pain Killers or not...

great work here! It may be that it turned out so awesome beacause you went to writing it so soon while the sensory details were so fresh. It was clear to me and quite vivid. If I had to change anything, I would probably work on line breaks in stanza 3 and 4. Some rhymes did happen, maybe by accident, however it does make you say, "hey that rhymes". I would avoid rhymes with this poem. I will look for more of your work. Well done.