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themoonman
themoonman
Dec 28, 2007 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

The Magic

The leaves have started falling

like minutes from the clock,

covering all I want and need
and dissipating...
like the fog.
 

I want to swim through every apple tree,

I want to climb the ocean's breeze,

I want to feel the love I know I need,

I need the magic back with me.
 

The colors of the leaves this year

seem brighter than they should.

I wish I knew just what to do... if I did,

perhaps I would...
 

content but not too happy,

intended for much more.

Complexities
the biggest part of me,

needing love's allure.
 

I am the painter with no canvas,

and I can't find my favorite pen.

I want to feel the warmth inside of me,

I need the magic back again.


— themoonman, Dec 28, 2007

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Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

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theladyblue

theladyblue

18 years 5 months ago

brilliant writing!!!

This touched my every sense and cleansed away the muck I have been wading in...thanks for the hand. I hope with this you understand that your magic blazed a trail across this page...good luck with the realization process!!! "For every shadow, no matter it's depth, is threatened by the morning's light..." <3 Emarie Photo: My mother and daughter Londyn (her first christmas this year!!!) I love the subtle cues of love...look at my moms hand hehe thank God for photograph
themoonman

themoonman

18 years 5 months ago

Brilliant?

I don't know about that...but I thank you for your wonderful comments....Happy New Year !!!
LD

leonard daranjo

17 years 11 months ago

Enjoyable

The leaves have started falling like minutes from the clock, covering all I want and need and then, dissipating.. like the fog. What a great way to start. You have really captured the magic. Best wishes
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 11 months ago

thanks Leonard...

for reading and commenting on this poem... glad you liked it and enjoyed reading... Richard
Electric Blue

Electric Blue

17 years 8 months ago

The Magic

Richard The Magic is always there my friend. You do not always need a a canvas as we poets can paint pictures with our words. hang in there maggie Electricblue
W

W.C.Wampler

17 years 6 months ago

Magic poem

Moon, This poem came on very strong. Stayed strong. Excellent work. wcw
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 6 months ago

WCW...

That is high praise indeed... not sure that I would put excellent with it but I do appreciate it.... thanks Richard
B

blistered-pen

17 years 6 months ago

hey,

still can't find your pen huh? that's too bad. I had a favorite pen.. ran out of ink when my mom borrowed it. I have a lot of pens.. but no favorites. a lot of notebooks, none of them filled. I always seem to find a new one I love then leave the old notebook in the dust. so my poems are pretty scattered. the magic.. I feel like my magic is gone as well. I don't know where, why or when it went, so I don't really know how to get it back. I think it comes when it thinks you're worthy. deciding you're not going to survive without it, so it invites you to its pity party. lovely poem man. kudos!
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 6 months ago

Magic is sometimey...

sometimey its here and... actually I think it is with us all the time... it is just a matter of getting it stirred up enough to lend it's pen that holds us back... thank you my friend Richard
ID

Ink Dragon

17 years 6 months ago

what drew me to this piece

were the paradoxons in ll. 6&7. They are brilliant! Minor inconsistency there in ll.10&11: Shouldn´t it be: The color of the leaves this year/seems brighter than it should? With all due respect, ID
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 6 months ago

Ink Dragon...

I thank you for reading and commenting and you are right... there is something amiss in that sentence... if I add an "s" to color I think that will fix it... let me know... I appreciate you catching it... thanks Richard
JL

Jo Latimer

17 years 6 months ago

Yeah, that elusive magic...

Believe I know what you mean. More frustrating to have felt it & lost it than never to have "climbed the oceans' breeze" at all, though... At least then you don't know what you're missing! Very enjoyable write. Jo
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muttering_madwoman

17 years 6 months ago

this one

punches to the gut. relating too deply, (which means its damn good, fyi) you find it, do send me some, eh? love, N
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 5 months ago

Hi...

if I should ever find it again... I'll try to send some... thanks Richard
ID

Ink Dragon

17 years 6 months ago

Hey

I´ve just noticed that my favourite pen is gone. I strongly suspect my dog of having eaten it. Maybe he thought it was a bone? Annoyed about this futile search, ID
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 5 months ago

Bad dog!

thanks for that smile... needed it today... Richard
O

orgami

17 years 5 months ago

Magik Pen

I used to use a fountain pen and practise longhand the old elders eighty now were taught how to write beautifully My mothers handwriting was terrific Now we use this machine no more handwriting I still practise now and then some say I have good handwriting but I wonder Im not that good good enough I suppose Have had so many pens come and go in my life Iconic isnt it the one that can make us write and write and write beautiful songs like the speech avaries of birds when the first ultraviolet rays of light find them magic yes I like your poem much Themoonman