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theladyblue
theladyblue
Dec 28, 2007 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Midnight's Lament

The wind perverted
Choking rain from the clouds
Turning winter bare trees
Into an ensemble of interpretive dance
And there I stood, in the midst of December
Shivering not so much from the cold
But from the need of warmth

Snapshots of balmy summer nights smoldered
And still I trembled unaided
As you slept gently without a clue
True, I could have told you
But it was always easier to revel alone
This bash is RSVP only
I just forgot to leave a paper trail

— theladyblue, Dec 28, 2007

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purplemoondoll

18 years 5 months ago

The wind perverted

I really enjoyed reading this, especially the first verse. The images were crystal clear. Nice work, :-) Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.
theladyblue

theladyblue

18 years 5 months ago

thanks so much!!!

I really do love rainy nights!!! Its just that sometimes they are too much of a good reason to cry. thanks again!!! "For every shadow, no matter it's depth, is threatened by the morning's light..." <3 Emarie
weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 5 months ago

This feels like such a womans poem,

(that is an observation, a feeling, not a crit) Yet I did not feel excluded. This is wonderfully generous poetry. Thank you. If I may offer some crit, the last line takes away from its power for me. But maybe it is necessary and true. cheers, Jess
theladyblue

theladyblue

18 years 5 months ago

i have to agree

this is most definitely in a feminine voice. I am glad you found a place here too! I absolutely did not mean for "gotta love a good pity party" to be a part of the poem! lol thanks for catching it for me!! "For every shadow, no matter it's depth, is threatened by the morning's light..." <3 Emarie
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meic

18 years 5 months ago

“… the need of

"... the need of warmth." The meaning of this finely-wrought poem turns around this phrase, it seems to me. The rather wistful sadness is given with such a light touch that it would be churlish to think of sympathy. Empathy is closer to the mark. Mike Photo: Me, September 7th 2007 - my 66th Birthday. Guernsey, Channel Islands, UK For my own orginal graphic art please visit: http://www.flickr.com/photos/7911705@N07
theladyblue

theladyblue

18 years 5 months ago

you always

catch the meaning sometimes before I do but this term was meant to be the turning point in this piece. thanks so much for your comments!!! "For every shadow, no matter it's depth, is threatened by the morning's light..." <3 Emarie
theladyblue

theladyblue

18 years 5 months ago

thanks so much!!!

"For every shadow, no matter it's depth, is threatened by the morning's light..." <3 Emarie
dbaker

dbaker

18 years 5 months ago

Your Poem

Thank You for taking the time to post your work. I enjoyed reading your poem a great deal. I think all of your metaphor's were spot on. Very good imagery. I think your last line probably could go. I see it as more of a parting shot to the unknown addresse than really supporting the poem. "This bash is RSVP only I just forgot to leave a paper trail" that sums up the poem nicely. In anycase it is just my opinion. All my best! -DS Baker
theladyblue

theladyblue

18 years 5 months ago

Thanks so much!!! I

Thanks so much!!! I actually never meant for "gotta love a good pity party" to be part of the poem. More of a parting shot as you said was its intention. lol "For every shadow, no matter it's depth, is threatened by the morning's light..." <3 Emarie
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IKnowNoBox

18 years 5 months ago

Perverted Wind as in possibly

a presence that comes as it feels to serve its purpose? smells drippy feel soaking sounds soggy look squishy taste like rain that tap tat Dry spot discoveries dash out Snuggle into wring-out In ink, Dabbler
theladyblue

theladyblue

18 years 5 months ago

Is the act of perversion what makes one a pervert?

If yes then I suppose your assumption is correct. I always thought that perversion (both act and culprit) was somewhat subjective. Your little ditty rings true on many points yet manages to balance on the seemingly impossible…a true perversion for the mind. Your words, as always, are stored for a later mulching date! Many thanks poet! "For every shadow, no matter it's depth, is threatened by the morning's light..." <3 Emarie
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IKnowNoBox

18 years 5 months ago

Perversion is very centric

as kinky is explorative.What one expects to get from the other perversion is a mint for those that can exploit those awash in it.Kink is more refined. Interesting topic.Part of the perverted gratification is the state of odd the subject (Pervertee) feels or shows squimishness...less a power grab,but still a power drain. In ink, Dabbler
theladyblue

theladyblue

18 years 5 months ago

I am possitive you have

I am possitive you have words aplenty...but will let you leave the matter with your dignity lol *wink "For every shadow, no matter it's depth, is threatened by the morning's light..." <3 Emarie