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IKnowNoBox
Dec 26, 2007 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Suspended Above A Writers Block

write it down...

put it in pen...

keep it from smearing...

handle each word with skill

placement is a challenge

if it comes too easily...

could it be too simple?

 

control the flow ...

stack verses for stanzas

for  poetry to stand on

one from  reflections

sometimes directions

to get others through

those passages

that we endure

 

bad poets can still be

good writers...

so when you write

with or without rhyme

broken flow or pace

shake it out on a later date

to see if it says it better

— IKnowNoBox, Dec 26, 2007

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Region, Country: East Coast, USA

Favorite Poets: Weird Elf, Shel Silverstein, The Poet Anonymous

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CROWNED WITH LAURELS

18 years 5 months ago

NO BOX

I think I would cut some words to make it flow better. Words like "and". Take a pen and just slash about a dozen words. I like the beginning and how it starts to read like a list. It works when each line is like a punch.Hope the comment was of some help.
RSScheerer

RSScheerer

18 years 5 months ago

outside the box

There was a teacher in high school who incessantly argued that my writing didn't count as poetry. You made me remember her and how I was always standing up against her (she was a nun in an all-girls' school). Part of the appeal in writing poetry is freedom from the burdens of 'perfect' writing. By the way, eventually I won. ~ Ronda
weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 5 months ago

Sometimes, nay often,

I wish I had become a teacher, I could have shared so much as a truly great English teacher, Arthur Lichfield did for me. But then again I wouldn't be me. It truly distresses me that so many young people are turned off poetry by bad teaching. And I don't blame the teachers, I blame a society that undervalues teachers so badly they get demoralised. I am almost sure Mr Lichfield is dead by now, but I had one of those magic moments when I ran into him years after I left school and was able to thank him for what he gave me. cheers, Jess
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meic

18 years 5 months ago

It worked just like a 8clog

It worked just like a 8clog dance, kicking sparks. Yep, times a bugger all right - sometimes we need a little 'contemplation in tranquility' before we commit to paper. * clog dance - a kind of morris dance performed by men [usually cotton mill workers] wearing metal-shod wooden clogs. 'Sparking clogs' by kicking the metal sole plates against the cobbled streets was a favourite occupation between dances. Mike Photo: Me, September 7th 2007 - my 66th Birthday. Guernsey, Channel Islands, UK For my own orginal graphic art please visit: http://www.flickr.com/photos/7911705@N07
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D. Fizzle

18 years 5 months ago

Hi

Hmmm, I'm not really good at critisizing...I can't even spell it...but here we go: I liked your title and the way I read it the poem had a good pace. I like the first verse of the last stanza and the last verse of the stanza. I don't know, but when I keep on rereading the poem and looking over it...it still doesn't seem finished...but it's not the ending that's not finished (I love your ending) but the beginning. Seems like you're missing something... =D. Fizzle
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TheRealTearsICry

18 years 5 months ago

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i enjoyed this poem....
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

18 years 5 months ago

Suspended

I Liked this a lot! Both the title and content. why do you care if we like rhythm,pattern, or pacing, if you won out with the nun, do your own thing!