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IN OTHER WORDS

Time has ridden you now
raw valleys
and look at you!

Homesick
is that the ache you nurse like a miser?
Nostalgia, in other words, leaves you
languishing in reminiscences
eyes blank, head elsewhere.

Hiraedd:
The old rhythmic pulse, born a hint
of a whisper, throbs ka-dunk, ka-dunk
in every hollow of the heart
and every beat of brain.

High here
on the wrist of the hand of Wales
my eyes, mist greased, skip the contours
of the gnarled knuckled hills
reaching southwards to the sea

Hidden
in the folds of fingers, rivers
gouge and sculpt resisting rock
to the coy and cosy valleys
home to the huddled towns

Houses
in long grey lines farrowing like piglets
against the somnolent green sow hills
and in the steep and clinging streets
not a single splutter of smoke

Rivers
wind, clean as I have never seen,
clear as the pools on the high mountain
with skinny-dipping girls as sleek as trout
and trout as plump and tasty as girls.

Voices
in concert, choirs and Sabbath chapel bells
ring, unhindered by the silent pit-wheels
and the absent march of miners
and the long-gone colliery horn.

So I must bid goodbye to you:
seek old companions, comrades of yesteryear,
who share my thoughts and know my tongue
and speak to me in other words,
and sing familiar songs.

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Hiraedd   [pron.  hee-rye-th   'th' as in 'thin'] is not directly translatable
- it's a combination of nostalgia, longing and home-sickness familiar to exiles.

Returning 'home' to Wales after many years I see many changes
- some good, some not so good ...

 

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barbsdad2003

18 years 4 months ago

Delicious ...

and delicate and sensitive. Oh to be versed in another language beyond American English (and that but to a shaky extent). Such freedom you have gained by your other-language background to express yourself so richly. And thus enrich your English-reading readers. But then you'd be great at English anyway ... even if it were your one and only language. A refreshing piece. Warmly flushed with nostalgia. And just the right amount. Michigan here is so uncommonly flat of terrain. I so miss the mountains ... and the valleys. And now you've wanly misted my day. Of course I'm not complaining. Not even a little bit. Thanx, Chuck
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meic

18 years 4 months ago

Flatness

Thanks Chuck, Even though I live in the industrial city of Manchester we are still in sight of the Pennine Hills and within an hour's drive from Snowdonia and the Lake District - so you can say that I've spent most of my life close to mountains. The one exception was when I took up my first teaching post in the fenlands of the Isle of Ely [not a real island!]. I took this post because they offered a rented house with the job. At first I found the flatness disappointing if not oppressive, but after a few weeks my perception sort of 'flipped' and what seemed negative became positive - I realised I'd NEVER seen so much sky! The skyscapes were panoramic and majestic, and the thunderstorms amazingly spectacular. I suddenly learned to appreciate the beauty of the place. Thanks for your lovely comment. Mike Photo: Me in my thirties - face furniture, version 2. All that hair! For graphic art please visit: http://www.flickr.com/photos/7911705@N07
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CROWNED WITH LAURELS

18 years 4 months ago

Images

You wrote this with many images that bring a smile to my face as well as painting a picture. The trout, the piglets, the miser are all metaphors that worked well for me.I think that the ache for home is incredible and you captured it here. Those who still live in their own hometown will never fully understand this emotion. Thanks for sharing. Lawrence
themoonman

themoonman

18 years 3 months ago

Tingles off the tounge...

I love that. This is a well written piece with such an interesting content..thanks for letting us see the river and hear the bells..enjoyed the read.....
infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

16 years 12 months ago

Meic

Thanks for the beautiful stroll through your country. The UK is on the top three for places that Jon and I want to go to.... this just made it ever more so appealing. Congrats on evolution. ----------------------------------------------------------- "Until that ‘morrow render unto me That which is mine my stipend well deserved The fairest flower of your progeny Your sons, your daughters your hopes and your dreams The cruel consequence of your conceit" - Steve Earle
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meic

16 years 12 months ago

Thanks for your lovely

Thanks for your lovely comment - yes, Wales is definitely worth a visit. Thank you also for your congrats on evolution - though my piece was only there momentarily. Mike "not all matterings of mind equal one violet" ~ e e cummings ~
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bjp

16 years 12 months ago

Dear Mike,

You have a very lyrical voice. I first read "somnolent green" as "soylent green" But there is no gun totin' Charlie Heston here, just my bad eyes. I particularly like the tease in the following verse: Rivers wind, clean as I have never seen, clear as the pools on the high mountain with skinny-dipping girls as sleek as trout and trout as plump and tasty as girls. And, the use of something missing to provide substance: Voices in concert, choirs and Sabbath chapel bells ring, unhindered by the silent pit-wheels and the absent march of miners and the long-gone colliery horn. You have a good eye for the poetic. regards, bjp
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meic

16 years 11 months ago

Thanks for your careful

Thanks for your careful attention and useful comment. Much appreciated. Mike "not all matterings of mind equal one violet" ~ e e cummings ~
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

16 years 11 months ago

Mike,

Even though we see new thing unfold before our eyes, our hearts still yearn for the things that we call home. "Houses in long grey lines farrowing like piglets against the somnolent green sow hills and in the steep and clinging streets not a single splutter of smoke" this stanza reminded me of my own home. great imagery here, I truly enjoyed it! thanks, Congrats!! Life is like a railroad track that leads to many junctures, if you stand on the track Love comes speeding along and runs you over!! Splat!!!!
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meic

16 years 11 months ago

‘Tis enough for me that

'Tis enough for me that you enjoyed the piece - that makes it well worth the posting. Thank you. Mike "not all matterings of mind equal one violet" ~ e e cummings ~
professor

professor

16 years 11 months ago

Hi Mike

There are some great lines and nostaligic imagery of life in the green and not so green Welsh valleys here. My favourite verse is: Houses in long grey lines farrowing like piglets against the somnolent green sow hills and in the steep and clinging streets not a single splutter of smoke There are a couple of parts that dont work so well for me "of a whisper, throbs ka-dunk, ka-dunk in every hollow of the heart and every beat of brain." the ka-dunk while colloquial spoils the whole tone and imagery...but i guess that may be just me. As a Neuroscientist a beating brain just doesnt gel although i might be able to accept a pulsing or sparking one. Not too sure about "as plump and tasty as girls" further down either....sounds overly Boticelli or Rubenesque All the best Keith
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meic

16 years 11 months ago

Thanks Keith. I agree with

Thanks Keith. I agree with you about the colloquialism and bad brain biology! I shall certainly bear this in mind at the next review of this piece. The girls bit, however, will stay. Whilst I would describe Rubens models as a great deal more than plump, Simonetta Vespucci [Boticelli's usual model] is simply deliciously rounded. Yummy! Mike "not all matterings of mind equal one violet" ~ e e cummings ~