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Explaination Unfit

"I only turned for a minute.'

that's how a baby got hit

 

"The kid is uncontrolable"

that's why I shook her

 

"I can't find a sitter"

so they put a baby in the closet

 

"I was only answering one call"

thats when a baby vanished

 

 

— IKnowNoBox, Dec 12, 2007

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Region, Country: East Coast, USA

Favorite Poets: Weird Elf, Shel Silverstein, The Poet Anonymous

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Mark

Mark

18 years 6 months ago

I know

When ya think about it there are so many ways to express affection why in this world would ya need to go and do that? I don't know David I just don't get it but on the flip side my Daughter was unexpected and loved and is successful in life. I think that it boils down to parents who were loved and those who were not and THOSE live distorted lives or die young. If you are alive now you were loved to a degree, you had to be right? So how do you "tap" into that love? hmm Mark L a point among infinite points of the circle am I
weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 5 months ago

this is bloody brilliant my friend

the title is great, it would have been too trite and unfitting to call it "Unaccountability" or "License to raise a child, not" It says so simply just why whinging, self-victimising jerks should never be parents. Again the to too thing. cheers, Jess wishing you a Salubrious Solstice
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IKnowNoBox

18 years 5 months ago

This hit me going near worse cause senerio

how a mother to a 4 or 5 year old goes for the black berry moment and the child wonders in larger circles away from her to almost get hit. Negligence in child care becomes greater as younger woman have kids,they are still in need of supervision themselves,and then they have a baby. Then you hear the excuses that are printed in the news paper and it jerks you back before the incident. In ink, Dabbler
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meic

18 years 5 months ago

The REALLY tragic thing is

The REALLY tragic thing is that the commentators truly see their excuses as reasonable explanations. You've nailed this phenomenon - pity you can't nail them. Mike photo: me, late teens/early twenties - 1st 'face furniture'
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IKnowNoBox

18 years 5 months ago

Really tragic

that look that stare back that they know it wasn't just that one time it was just the worse moment.The last stanza may change though. In ink, Dabbler
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TheRealTearsICry

18 years 5 months ago

...

wow, powerful.
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Ancientone

18 years 5 months ago

Having a baby....

does not make a woman a Mother, just like being at home does not make one a parent. When we have children, our lives are for bearing responsibility to and for them, both Mother and Father, not selfish living. Pop culture has ruined an entire generation it almost seems, ugh! Patrick/AO
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IKnowNoBox

18 years 5 months ago

The line between sympathy to a grieving mother

and bearing responsibility is complicated...neglect is a tender topic I find. even with alert parents there are dangers.I hope this puts the subtle things in a light for examination. In ink, Dabbler
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cricket

18 years 5 months ago

very powerful

This is very powerful , and sad that things like this happen. but again not all are young parents either. seems some of the older generation too. being a parent is a great responsibility to and for them correct. for all parents old and young alike. cricket
Mark

Mark

18 years 5 months ago

I I

I miss Kelsey
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IKnowNoBox

18 years 5 months ago

Yes I am sure that when the time comes

to send "children"into the world that it is the big care that makes it hard and that says alot to the way the child was raised. As opposed to the kid who runs away and the "parent"is like great the brat is gone. Even neglected children have their reflective moments I am sure they at least learn to care for others but the oppisite far is that children can be too insulated and when they are sent into the world get broad sided by responsiblity.
Mark

Mark

18 years 5 months ago

Hi Five

5 and There is no explaination that fits except unfit parents Nice title it swings !
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IKnowNoBox

18 years 5 months ago

Real people...real moments

and every day the paper boy brings more. In ink, David ps I am hopeful to bring solution to the root of the problem once the roots are exposed.
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marcm

18 years 5 months ago

Well done, David. As an

Well done, David. As an elementary school teacher, I have seen hundreds of kids come and go over the last 11 years. Most come from caring and stable families. Unfortunately, the key word here is most. I have had to file several social service reports for physical abuse and neglect. Each time you have to do this it takes a piece of you that you never really get back. It is a terrible feeling when you hear that a kid you had in class at 7, 8, 10 years old has ended up in jail, on the streets, or worse. You always wonder if you could have done more for them. Poems like this one say so much as to the power and responsibility involved with parenting. Thanks for writing it. Marc
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IKnowNoBox

18 years 5 months ago

Thank you Marcm

Thank you for being on the front lines...When we do not turn away we will witness light in action. In ink, David
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purplemoondoll

18 years 5 months ago

There are no excuses

I think everyone has already voiced my thoughts. This is a brilliant write David. You captured the theme extremely well in some very well executed lines. I could hear the voices clearly whining their excuses as I read. There is no such thing as a perfect parent - we all make mistakes - but unfortunately as Meic said those who perpetrate the crimes you depicted here often believe their own lies. There are no excuses - well done my friend. :-) Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.
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IKnowNoBox

18 years 5 months ago

It is that look in the eyes of a Parent or Guardian/Caretaker

That knows it was neglect and the system is sensitive to that...they take it into account for legal matters as well.There are no second chances some times,there are no close calls as well but when they happen it is wise for parent caretaker to remember it.Sure the other side is an insulated child...so the balance is exposer with a foundation of rites of passage (something I have read in a few resources shows this at the most primitive levels. Thank you for reading Kaz. In ink, David ps When we do not look away...