Home (Poem For Grammy)

--home------

drop by drop
piece by piece
steadily over months
moved by years
homes have been built,
raised, & protected to
house this
feeling.

charge by charge
potassium by calcium
assertive by receptivity
negative by positive
cells to tissue to organ to system to body
we're made
to house this
being.

moment by moment
lesson by lesson
Day by day
by sunrise by sunset
we're taught,
to forget -
to dispatch, to return with no receipt...
this gift-
this feeling - of home.

Home by Home
family by family
self by self
to
brother to sister
mother to father
community to nation
to
nation to world
we must rekindle
burn
with this feeling -
Home.

I want to be the humbled presence trees enjoy basking in

I want to be the tree . Immobile, yet completely full -
still . moving

— IKnowNoBox, Dec 07, 2007

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: East Coast, USA

Favorite Poets: Weird Elf, Shel Silverstein, The Poet Anonymous

Critiques

Fearlessfox

18 years 6 months ago

home

totally refreshing and full of feeling and meaning. I like this. Ffox

IKnowNoBox

18 years 6 months ago

gratitude -

That's how I felt writing it, t'was in the midst of a Dance Church that's hosted out here. -Eoin

Calliope

18 years 6 months ago

I as Well...

...want to be that tree For so many times I have felt this urge to be as free as an ancient tree swaying in that heavenly breeze,and you could almost hear the sound of angels singing.This was a lovely piece I will treasure.This was incredibly well written and the emotion high.I loved it! Lacy, Where power currupts ,poetry cleanses.

Mark

18 years 6 months ago

Progressively Great

I want to be a Silver Birch and I wish to be at Grammy's home but she is in heaven I know it is a fact for me but the feeling the warmth the memories remain. Mark L a point among infinite points in the circle am I

DeWaal

18 years 6 months ago

Unusual emphasis

Hi Dabbler My reading is that your poem ponders the various aspects and connotations of the concept "home". It is many things, according to the poem: the body, the mind, the family, the community. I also find the use you make of the white in the verse lines interesting: mother to father community to nation to nation to world we must rekindle burn with this feeling - Home. The progressive indentations from the left give the lines a kind of laden step-like feeling. The poem end on the word "Home" deeply indented from the left. It's like using colons for emphasis, but it creates a higher degree of contrast between e.g. "feeling -" and "Home" in the last two lines, than an unindented line would have had. I think the danger here is that one can overemphasize and lessen the poem's subtlety. De Waal

IKnowNoBox

18 years 5 months ago

This poem is a poem...

that I submitted on behalf of a friend as I have done before.I will have him reply as soon as possible.

meic

18 years 5 months ago

The family tree: ever

The family tree: ever growing, ever rooted. I don't think I can usefully add to [imho] De Waal's scrupulous analysis, save to say that this poem resonated deeply where I live. Some poems are good, few are important, as this one. Mike photo: me, late teens/early twenties - 1st 'face furniture'

weirdelf

18 years 5 months ago

Love this

the construction, the meaning, the thought. Have been away to long. cheers, Jess wishing all a Salubrious Solstice

Ancientone

18 years 5 months ago

A tree....

as Joyce Kilmer wrote, in veins versed by Eoin from "drop by drop... charge by charge... moment by moment... home by home..." till a feeling of home and tree well rooted and full stands tall at the end, no poem "as lovely as a tree. You came close. :) Patrick/AO