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First Snow
the first inkling we get
comes down on quantum waves of light
from small machines that glide along
the thin divide that separates
our crowded world from endless space
more machines that have replaced
the myth and superstition
of past prediction
filter through the messages we get and
build a myriad of pictures showing
where on earth it will be snowing
once the frigid air slips down
from Earth’s frozen spinning crown.
scientists hunched in darkened rooms
amid the glow of flickering screens
watch these models all unfold
they extrapolate scenarios
and then reveal their expert views
via radio and TV news.
cities wipe the cobwebs from their ploughs
farmers buy more feed for animals
supermarkets jack their prices
homeless shelters ask for blankets
commuters winterize their cars
owners overstock their restaurants and bars
reporters remind all of what to do
and those of us who listen, do
and First Snow comes
down here
down on the surface of our world
the street is suddenly bereft
of life
the pushers and the junkies,
the gangsters are all gone
the hookers close their legs
and tuck themselves away
in hourly motels
safe against the sudden cold
the telephone their brand-new friend
the panhandlers that always haunt
the footsteps of the few that walk
all hunker down and disappear
and even cops prefer
the warmth within
the dry interiors
of Black-And-Whites
to catching criminals at night.
and when I walk
my footsteps do not ring
or echo from the walls
of frozen homes that spout
their furnace heat like smoke
upon the frigid air
I am silent
safe within a mute aloneness
I do not share with others
through swirling white I move
the only thing that does besides
the flashing orange lights
of ploughs that scrape
fresh snow from streets
with fitful sparks
and steaming heat turning to ice
from frozen chimmneys
and in the freeze of polar air
centered in the emptiness
I savor my aloneness
and wonder when
First Snow will come again
Critiques
meic
18 years 6 months ago
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