THE CLICHÉ-HOUNDS

Let me, if you please,say this is an awesome poem. :-)Even though I think I will need a dictionary to decipher some of the words. A thoroughly enjoyable read. I enjoyed the journey and the structure immensely from beginning to end. Nice work Mark! Was that cliche? lol Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.

can be just as confusing as some of my not so good work but a cliche master is non the less a great read. Personally I like the logical writing and simple as well. I really do not think that reading a poem should mean alot of work. I wish to take my time reading and savor not figure. Thanks for this Mike or did you change your name lol Kaz Mark PS Hi Kaz :)

well that is some fanciful writing cliches are not a bad thing I use them once in awhile but try hard not to , It is when a poem is nothing but one cliche after another that I will not even bother reading the entire poem as it tends to become quite boning I like a happy medium between easy read and a poem that is creative and I do not need the dictionary sitting by my hand. Your poem has combined both very nicely. Chrys

You had better knock it off man. I had convinced myself to dislike most non-rhyming verse and you're just plain ruining it for me. I cannot think that a smoke filled pub, some decent ale, a good cigar and listening to that Welsh wit of yours wouldn't cure what ails me or just about anybody with half a brain. Write on if you must. But I warn you, I intend to continue to want to hate your wiity, romantic, and wily Welsh words. Aye you're a crafty breed and there's no doubting it. "hoarse hullaballoo of harriers" indeed!

Well if the Boomer is correct and it's a Welsh virus then I should tarry there, and gain by some infection. Craig

A poem of style, counter-elitism (the elite of those refusing the name elite), competition and warning. I like it, grounded as it is in feeling. It is amazing how inspiration works. I am especially partial to the following lines: Sanction, if you please, a well-known phrase or two I am confused by untranslatable utterances and outré flights of wordy fancy reversed, imploded, combined and recombined meaning obscured and ever out of reach. Sanction, if you please, some plain and simple words. Let me, if you please, communicate direct I am trapped In the convoluted, involuted multi-clausal maze of mangled structures, obfuscation and dilettante punctuation and inaccurate spelling to boot. Let me, if you please, make common cause with common men. Heard closer the hollow sounds of hunting hounds, jaws a-drool, eyes wild in the search. In the ultimate literary critical thrill The cliché-hounds slink in for the kill. Best Regards, bjp

...I found myself doing a bit of gnashing of teeth, until I realized 'twas my pen I had chewed. I fear, Meic.....that I'll have to grow a beard to cover the ink-stains on my chin. Thanks a lot ! l.o.l. #{:>{)]@==== write on ! docmaverick.

Your point is made, and the taste of the acid in which you simmered this dish (red wine vinegar, if I'm not mistaken) is just right--and it makes your mild rebuke zippy on the tongue, and memorable. I would like to have seen variation of the 'if you please' phrases. There is cliché in that phrase, but the particular phrase is almost infinitely substitutable using other useful cliché from the common speech. 'If you would,' 'with your permission,' 'your leave granted,' and so on. I don't think your point would have been missed, and (in my estimation) it might have underscored the point by pointing to the richness of the common speech with still more examples than you use at the beginnings of the four interior stanzas. A few well-aimed shots might do the trick--but even fine marksmen can miss, and a hail of shot is likely to hit something, even without a known and visible target. (I'm aware of the possibility that your aim might have been to make a stalking horse of one of your commentators. Should I be fit with steel shoes?) ---------------------- The structure is interesting. Does it work as aid to memory for oral presentation? It doesn't seem likely to, from my angle on it, but if it does work so for you, I'd like to hear about that. If my understanding of how memory works wants revision, that'd be important news to me, and urgent. Take a peek at my "brute poem," which touches on the general problem you address here, should you find yourself with a bored instant on your hands. Perry