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theladyblue
theladyblue
Dec 02, 2007 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

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Published in my poetry anthology Soapbox Trophies.  Release date TBA.  Thanks for all your support! :)


— theladyblue, Dec 02, 2007

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meic

18 years 6 months ago

The subject of this poem is

The subject of this poem is doubly fortunate - to be selected by you and to be feted with such beauty. This is packed tight with emotion without a trace of bathos. You certainly know how to finish a piece with maximum effect. My soul is left slightly charred. Hwyl fawr! Mike
theladyblue

theladyblue

18 years 6 months ago

you shouldnt make a girl blush!!!

this was actually my first attempt at a sonnet but when i realized that the structure would rip this piece apart i decided against it. this is a very special piece for me in more ways than one and i cant thank you enough for your opinion!!! <3 Emarie
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purplemoondoll

18 years 5 months ago

Where eyes wept black torrents of fevered love

This is a great line. I like the way you have used colour to describe the emotion and passion felt. It works really well. As Meic said this is jam packed with imagery that makes the whole piece come alive and dance from beginning to end. I really like this. Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.
theladyblue

theladyblue

18 years 5 months ago

many thanks

this is a very special piece for me...the inspiration one soul and give another is truely awe inspiring...and he was that if nothing else!!! "For every shadow, no matter it's depth, is threatened by the morning's light..." <3 Emarie
theladyblue

theladyblue

17 years 5 months ago

once again...

thank you so much!!! you are so kind Janice! <3 Emarie @~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@ "Tempted by your Tainted Love I sure do love the way you come inside my crystal ball..." Buckcherry 'Next to You'
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Ink Dragon

17 years 6 months ago

I am deeply impressed

with your vivid imagery. I will read more of your pieces and would be honoured if you read some of mine. Poetic Regards, Ink Dragon
theladyblue

theladyblue

17 years 5 months ago

you are so awesome!

thanks so much! <3 Emarie @~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@ "Tempted by your Tainted Love I sure do love the way you come inside my crystal ball..." Buckcherry 'Next to You'
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Ink Dragon

16 years 9 months ago

Emarie,

you asked for punctuation, so you shall get it! Sapphire runs the ink of my veins, hot (here you may want to consider moving the "hot" in front of "sapphire") - At the thought of me, do you cry silver? Otherwise, no commas needed in my opinion (I am chucking the end of line punctuation out of my older writes at the moment, too). Yours, ~Nina