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Held By His Hands

The wounded sparrow spirals downward out of the sky.

On gilded wings, she flew.

Struck by an arrow, she plummets.

Faster! Faster! To the rocks below.

Out of control, she catches the wind

And glides unsteadily into a beautiful palm tree.

Dates are clustering everywhere in the beautiful palm

Whose bent and willowy trunk has withstood

Many, many storms of the worst kind...

So she has food to eat.

The scent of rain brings refreshing dewdrops

And forms tiny pools of crystal clear liquid

In the bends of the leaves...

So she has water to drink.

With the raging storm at hand, she hides beneath

The shelter of the huge palm fronds.

Their gentle caresses touch her broken wing,

And soon she starts to fly again. She may fly unsteadily, yet she flies.

Touched by the very Hand of God,

She continues her journey towards home.

 

Wolfycat.

— wolfycat, Nov 29, 2007

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Mark

Mark

18 years 6 months ago

Nice Story Wolfy !

Let me know is this a true story you saw happen to the bird? Simple as that? Or is this more deep, a metaphore? Let me know OK bcause I tend to take things face value (at least on the first reading) Truly, Mark
wolfycat

wolfycat

18 years 6 months ago

This is a true story...

And tells of the many struggles in one's life; because at times you stumble, fall, and get back up again. Sometimes it's just all in the mind...such as doubts, fears, etc. Thanks so much for reading and leaving me a comment! I have to edit this poem. I posted too soon. Thanks Mark. Wolfy.
Mark

Mark

18 years 6 months ago

On the second read

and with a little help ::smiles:: I like it even more and will be anticipating the further work. Thanks, Mark
wolfycat

wolfycat

18 years 6 months ago

Thanks so much...

David, and I am so very excited for your last poem...it is very good and was a huge success! I will be posting more soon... Nice to hear from you again. Wolfy Cat.
Mark

Mark

18 years 1 month ago

Wolfy

I just noticed there may be a problem with the tense in the beginning of your poem. Thesecond line is past but the rest of the poem is present. I think you mean > On guilded wings she flies You may thing of this as well Unsteady yet she flies "She may" sounds a bit off like - Who is this talking here? I still like this poem as mush as the first time I read it ;) Mark
wolfycat

wolfycat

18 years ago

Hi Mark...

The way that I meant 'on gilded wings she flew' is that she was doing great and then came the downfall. 'She flew' is meant to be past tense. There are some unsettling aspects to this write...and I'm still thinking about it. Cat